Talk:Recess (School)

I contributed a few sentences about the importance of problem solving in a child's social-emotional development and how free play helps to foster those skills. Problem solving is an integral part of child development and recess or free play gives the students and the teacher an opportunity to gain those skills in a comfortable, casual setting. Acraft2 (talk) 01:42, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Adufrechou Feedback: Recess
The information given was very thorough. I agree with Hanheb25 that you should elaborate more on the fact that in our country, people are in charge of creating recess times. I would go through and look at if some of the information is coming off biased. I noticed that a lot of things were not cited, so to make sure that you are not plagiarizing. Everything else looks really good! Mostly just going through and checking the flow of the sentences. Allison DufrechouAdufrechou (talk) 08:13, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

JHolman Feedback: Recess
In the introduction, the first sentence is a run on. It can be split into two sentences. I would break it off after social activity. Begin the new sentence with "During this time students are exposed to "social activity....". The first sentence for indoor recess is a run on as well.  In the United States portion, I know it states that most states do not have policies but I had a couple of questions: Are students given multiple recesses or just one?  Is PE considered recess?  Maybe try to add some more details to this portion.  Overall, great job with fixing this article.  There was a bunch of valuable information added and it flows very smoothly.  Jessica HolmanJessnHolman (talk) 05:27, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Hanheb25 Feedback: Recess
In the section "Effects on Classroom Behavior", there is an unnecessary "be" in the third line. I think that this was a really well put together article. This group did a great job of separating the topics and giving in-depth information in each section. Maybe for the section of United States, you could find articles that discuss how the lack of recess and play with children is a critical issue today. I think that you could elaborate on the fact that in our country, people who are in charge of creating recess times, do not even understand the severity of children's play, quite like the teachers who see it first hand. This group covers this topic very well, so maybe even pulling information from other areas to add the depth to this paragraph would make it even better!

Overall, I think this is a great article with so much helpful information that really underlines the importance of recess and the uses of it in schools.

Hannah HebertHanheb25 (talk) 20:22, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

THays Feedback: Recess
I agree with Hannah. I believe this is very well put together article and this group is on a good track! Compared to the original article, the revisions that were made, helped to make the article easier to read in my opinion. I feel like the introduction could use some more information as well as the portion for indoor recess. But other than that, wonderful job guys! Taylor Hays (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 02:39, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

GGlapion: Recess Contributions
I edited the recess data section, the childhood obesity section, the effects on classroom management section, and the restriction of recess as disciplinary action section. In the recess data section, a few different things needed citations for certain data. I either found the statistic that the other author had used or found a new and correct statistic. Also, a few different sentences were plagiarized. When I googled certain sentences they popped up exactly as typed on wikipedia on other websites. So, I either paraphrased and cited or found a new original sentence with information that would fit. Also, some of the information in this section had no link to what was supposed to be being said. For example, there was a sentence that contrasted indoor recess to outdoor recess without making this clear. I removed this sentence as it was not fit for this portion of the article. Also in this section, there was some really biased information such as saying that every child's schedule is demanding and that they do not have enough time for physical activity. I replaced this with non-biased statements. In the childhood obesity section there wasn't a lot of information. But, where there was information, it either needed citations or was plagiarized. Much of the work that was here was statistics with no evidence to back it up. Also, I added scholarly sources to really advance the meaning and truth behind this article and really support its foundation. It was sad to see so many sentences plagiarized. I fixed this by finding the source and paraphrasing and citing their information. In the effects on classroom management section, I added more information to make this section stronger as well as added citations. Much of the article needed citations as well as information to back up what they were saying. For example, they would say "according to a study" but then not cite that study. Also, sometimes I couldn't even find a study that even correlated with the statistics listed. In the restriction of recess as disciplinary action section there was biased information as well as many needed citations. For the biased information, I found information that was backed up by evidence and changed that sentence. As for the sentences that needed citations, I either found the source from where their information came from or I found new and more accurate information for that sentence. As a summary of what I did to change this article, I added citations, some scholarly and some regular to make this article stronger. Also, I made sure that anything that was plagiarized was changed. Lastly, I took out all biased information and created a less biased and more fact based article. Gglapion (talk) 23:36, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

HaleyOathout : Recess Contributions
I contributed information to the opening paragraph explaining what recess was in the field of education. Indoor recess, had information that was not needed so I did deleted some information and added more. I delelted Sudbury Schools, Parliamentary Procedure, Stand at Ease, and United States Congress because there was no need for it in discussion of Recess in relation to Education. Hayoathout (talk) 00:09, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

JBaumgartner: Recess Feedback
You have outlined a very ambitious plan for contributions. The central contribution outlined here now in bold is excellent. The author should go ahead and make changes in the Article and record the information on the Talk page. I would encourage you to limit the amount of information that is duplicated from the existing article to the sandbox. Instead have only the sections that you are correcting. Nice work. Jj baumgartner (talk)Jjbaumgartner —Preceding undated comment added 23:02, 22 October 2018 (UTC)