Talk:Red Clay State Historic Park/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 02:29, 1 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

Infobox and lede

 * Cherokee removal is double-linked; "forced migration" should be the general link to Forced displacement and then "forced to emigrate" should be the specific link
 * - also cut redundant wording and split sentence.
 * Similarly, "being" should be delinked in the phrase "Cherokee people being forced to emigrate", as currently it's a MOS:SEAOFBLUE situation
 * ✅ - reworded completely; see above.
 * Per MOS:LEADCITE, anything linked in the body doesn't have to be linked in the lede (I know if you submitted for DYK they sometimes make you cite in the lede)
 * "latter 20th century" "late 20th century" or "later"
 * ✅ - changed to "later part of the 20th century", as I don't think most would consider the late 1950s and 1960s part of the late 20th century.
 * Another MOS:SEAOFBLUE issue in "Tennessee–Georgia state line"
 * ✅ - unlinked "state line".
 * Should really be an en dash in "Tennessee–Georgia" and not a hyphen
 * Should really be an en dash in "Tennessee–Georgia" and not a hyphen

Cherokee history

 * Why is Tennessee the only state not linked in the first paragraph?
 * Probably because it's linked in the lead. I've gone ahead and linked it again.
 * Double check source to make sure "Chatooga" is really spelled with one T, I've only seen it with two
 * No comma needed after "government to Red Clay"
 * Link Mississippi River
 * "they secretly signed the Treaty of New Echota"
 * Per MOS:SEASON, "summer of" should not be used to refer to a time of the calendar year
 * "they secretly signed the Treaty of New Echota"
 * Per MOS:SEASON, "summer of" should not be used to refer to a time of the calendar year
 * Per MOS:SEASON, "summer of" should not be used to refer to a time of the calendar year
 * Per MOS:SEASON, "summer of" should not be used to refer to a time of the calendar year

Post-removal

 * Comma after "February 29, 1840" per MOS:DATECOMMA
 * "Beginnin in 1864" "Beginning in 1864"
 * "got into a skirmish" "engaged in a skirmish"
 * "and were later demolished"
 * "got into a skirmish" "engaged in a skirmish"
 * "and were later demolished"
 * "and were later demolished"

State park history and events

 * In January 1970, the Bradley County Quarterly Court agreed to purchase the land from Corn for the purpose of developing it into a recreation area and tourist attraction. WP:LIMITED violation
 * "eternal flame" is going to need either a link or more specification for unfamiliar readers
 * ✅ - provided a short description (more detail is provided in the description section). Also split run-on sentence.
 * "originally Cherokeefest" "labeled as/known as/titled Cherokeefest"
 * "until 2019" implies one was not held in 2019, but the article says there was
 * - reworded to clarify that the last event occurred in 2019.
 * "until 2019" implies one was not held in 2019, but the article says there was
 * - reworded to clarify that the last event occurred in 2019.

Description

 * Same deal as above, Tennessee-Georgia should be an en dash
 * Comma after "Cohutta, Georgia" per MOS:GEOCOMMA
 * Cohutta should also be delinked, as it was linked above
 * Eternal Flame is capitalized here but lowercase in the history section
 * Capitalized in the history section, as it is a proper name.
 * "The grave of Sleeping Rabbit, a prominent Cherokee who fought in the War of 1812, is reportedly located in the eastern part of the park. His grave, however, is unmarked." "An unmarked grave believed to belong to Sleeping Rabbit, a prominent Cherokee who fought in the War of 1812, is reportedly located in the eastern part of the park."
 * Colon instead of comma after "The park contains three trails"
 * Capitalized in the history section, as it is a proper name.
 * "The grave of Sleeping Rabbit, a prominent Cherokee who fought in the War of 1812, is reportedly located in the eastern part of the park. His grave, however, is unmarked." "An unmarked grave believed to belong to Sleeping Rabbit, a prominent Cherokee who fought in the War of 1812, is reportedly located in the eastern part of the park."
 * Colon instead of comma after "The park contains three trails"
 * Colon instead of comma after "The park contains three trails"

General comments

 * All photos are relevant to the article
 * The Blue Hole Spring image does not have any license attached to it; this should be remedied
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * One area of close paraphrasing above, otherwise the amount of proper nouns makes the Earwig score artificially high
 * - I think I addressed the closed paraphrasing. It doesn't appear to be showing up.
 * - I think I addressed the closed paraphrasing. It doesn't appear to be showing up.

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and please let me know when you're finished! —  Ghost River  16:18, 1 January 2022 (UTC)


 * - I think I've addressed all the comments above. Please let me know if they are adequate. Bneu2013 (talk) 01:00, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you for making those changes, happy to pass the article! —  Ghost River  23:41, 3 January 2022 (UTC)