Talk:Redrum (Era Istrefi song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sebbirrrr (talk · contribs) 20:55, 17 May 2022 (UTC)

Hi there! I'll be taking this article for review. I'll leave comments soon.

Infobox

 * Add alt text for the cover

Lead

 * "English-language" seems unnecessary
 * "focusing on the concept materialism" → "focusing on the concept of materialism"
 * "Istrefi's appeareance" → what does appearance refer to here?
 * Removed. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:42, 18 May 2022 (UTC)


 * "the song attained success" → "attained success" seems unnecessary since the song only charted on three charts
 * "topping the charts in Albania" → "peaked at number one in Albania"
 * "reaching the top 50 in the Commonwealth of Independent States (CIS) and the United States" → "reached the top 30 in the Commonwealth of Independent States (CIS) and the top 50 on Billboard Dance/Electronic Songs"

Background and composition

 * Link BonBon and add its release year in brackets
 * "premiered for digital download and streaming" → "was released for digital download and streaming"
 * "It was written by Istrefi, David Singer and William Vanderhayden, while produced by Felix Snow and Mark Ralph." → "Istrefi wrote it with David Singer and William Vanderhayden, while Felix Snow and Mark Ralph produced it."
 * "she knows the relationship has many deficits" → "she knows the relationship is deficient"
 * Add a period after the last lyric

Reception

 * "Upon its release" → remove "its"
 * "of V Magazine" → "of V" and link V to V (American magazine)
 * "As of Beautiful Buzzz's" → "According to Beautiful Buzzz's"
 * Ref 8 says "killer aesthetic" instead of "murderous aesthetic"
 * Where does Ref 9 compliment Istrefi's fashion?
 * I may have got mixed up, removed. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:42, 18 May 2022 (UTC)


 * "similarly complimented the singer's fashion" → "expressed a similar opinion regarding the singer's fashion"
 * "on the last issue of the country's Top 100 chart for the week ending on 12 March 2017" → this reads awkward, I'm confused by what "last issue" is supposed to mean

Music video

 * "was hired for the shooting, for which Millicent Hailes was credited as the director" → "was hired for the shooting of the video, while Millicent Hailes directed it"
 * Barbera and Krask's roles don't seem worth mentioning
 * "in a smoky-surrounding and red-colored setting" → "in a red-color setting surrounded by smoke"
 * "Generally viewed positively by reviewers," → "The video was received positively by reviewers."
 * "V Magazine's Truman Ports" → change to "Ports" since you already mentioned the publication the author is writing for and their full name
 * "Currinn from Critic Jonni" → same thing as above

Track listing

 * Everything is alright here

Credits and personnel

 * Everything is alright here

Charts

 * Everything is alright here

Release history

 * Add a couple more Apple Music links for "Various" as you've only added one, which is from Kosovo

Outcome

 * for 7 days until all issues are fixed! Sebbirrrr (talk) 22:43, 17 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Hey, I've adressed your comments and thank you a lot for the review. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:50, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
 * You're welcome. Everything is alright now so I'm