Talk:Reflections (concert residency)/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 04:36, 11 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 12:25, 12 June 2024 (UTC)


 * "It began on November 4, 2005, and concluded on December 10, 2005, after completing eight shows" - "completing" can probably be omitted here without detracting from the meaning
 * Removed


 * "The influence of artists such as Mariah Carey, Sheena Easton, and Whitney Houston was particularly apparent in her musical style" - I would go for something simpler, like "Her musical style was influenced by artists such as Mariah Carey, Sheena Easton, and Whitney Houston"
 * Revised as suggested


 * "She admires Houston's R&B sound and Carey's songwriting, and cites various OPM artists, including Sharon Cuneta and Kuh Ledesma, as her role models." - While I am sure she still admires them, this sticks out as the only present tense sentence among a past tense paragraph so you could make it past tense too.
 * Thanks for catching this. I have switched to past tense


 * "When explaining the concept and title of the show, Velasquez asserted, "It will be like a retrospective concert ...it will be an evening for looking back on how I started". - Maybe make the second comma a colon
 * Done


 * "Velasquez then appeared onstage and joined the singers as the number continued" - Is there a more formal-sounding word that could be used instead of "number", like maybe performance?
 * Agreed. changed


 * Same question about this part: "After the number, she sat centerstage"
 * Did some tweaking on this as well.


 * The sources are all the same ones generally used in this series of articles so I am sure they are fine on the reliability front. I have some minor concerns about notability but GAN isn't the venue for that.
 * That's all I could come up with. Looks like another great article that is ready to join your other ones about Velasquez. Happy to pass this once these are addressed.--NØ 14:51, 12 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking up this review MaranoFan. Appreciate your comments and suggestions. All have been actioned. Let me know if I may have missed anything. Pseud 14 (talk) 15:29, 12 June 2024 (UTC)