Talk:Reiss Nelson/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 14:44, 23 December 2023 (UTC)

Reviewer: Harper J. Cole (talk · contribs) 21:43, 7 April 2024 (UTC)

I'll take this review on. --Harper J. Cole (talk) 21:43, 7 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Some comments; let me know what you think. A lot of it is punctuation.
 * Is there a citation for him being influential? It's a bit vague as a term.
 * influential was probably the wrong word, I changed it to 'important Arsenal player' alluding to comments made by Arteta in ref #52. Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * A rather long sentence that uses the phrase "the school" three times. Also, it looks like both words are usually capitalised in "Inner London", which can be wikilinke, together with Walworth. Suggested rewording:
 * Switched Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Should be "led" (past tense).
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Remove "both", as there are more than two people listed.
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Specify that his mother is driving him, as commuting can mean a lot of things.
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Semicolon instead of a comma here, as the rest of the sentence expands on this statement.
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Specify that this was in the U21s so people have an idea of the ages involved.
 * Added mention Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Put an "and" after "byline", as reaching the byline did not in and of itself set them up (he still had to cross the ball in).
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Replace the first comma with a semicolon. Also remove the second comma, I think.
 * Perfect Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * This time the semicolon should be a comma, unless you rephrase ("these included...") When semicolons are used, each section of the sentence should be a valid sentence by itself.
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Replace the comma with a semicolon or rephrase ("coming on as a substitute...")
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Comma instead of semicolon.
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Bundesliga as it's used here for the first time.
 * Wikilinked Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Semicolon instead of comma.
 * Replaced Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * A bit too much to cover with one sentence. I'd split it into two different sentences with a full stop after "Germany".
 * Adjusted Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Shouldn't be hyphenated unless it's followed by a noun (e.g. "first-team player").
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Also, I'm not sure how the number 24 relates to getting first team football, and the citation doesn't clarify.
 * I removed the mention of searching for first team football Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * A bit awkward, as it sounds like there's more than one net. Perhaps just say "a confident finish".
 * Adjusted Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * There's a typo on the word "Arsenal" in the title of citation 26.
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Wikilink offside in this paragraph.
 * Added Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * You don't need the word "later" as this is implied.
 * Removed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Specify that he was an unused substitute in the final.
 * Addressed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * This sentence construction makes it sound like his appearances are being limited by the season itself, rather than by his injuries. How about
 * Semicolon instead of comma.
 * Very good point, substituted Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Small "s" on "sporting director".
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Semicolon instead of comma.
 * Substituted Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Semicolon after "club". Also, "his side" is used twice; replace the second "his side" with "they".
 * All fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * To avoid repeating "loan", replace the second one with "spell".
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Again no hyphen in "first team".
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * No need for the word "later", as this is implied.
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Specify that this was voted on by Arsenal fans.
 * Addressed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Swap the semicolon and the comma.
 * Swapped Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Two separate words ("a part").
 * Fixed Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Harper J. Cole (talk) 23:30, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much, I think I've addressed all your comments. When I wrote this article, I had really just learnt how to use semicolons and decided that they would make up the bulk this article apparently... Let me know if there is any other problems. :) Idiosincrático (talk) 02:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks; I've made two more minor punctuation changes and will now promote. Of course, with this being an active player, the article will have to be updated as his career continues. If you're unsure about semicolons etc., the Guild of Copy Editors are a resource you can use for that. Harper J. Cole (talk) 19:38, 8 April 2024 (UTC)