Talk:Remember Me (video game)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Anarchyte (talk · contribs) 11:26, 5 June 2017 (UTC)

Hello! I'll take a look at this sometime tomorrow.  Anarchyte  ( work  &#124;  talk )   11:26, 5 June 2017 (UTC)

Lead

 * Throughout the story, she is permitted to use her Memory Remix power to ultimately refurbish people's recollections. What do you mean by this? Can she alter the way people remember stuff?
 * Yes, that's right. –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Is this edit fine?
 * That works. –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Originally a PlayStation 3-exclusive titled Adrift, it was cancelled in 2011, then later purchased by Capcom, and resurrected as a multiplatform game. Would this be better as Originally planned to PlayStation 3-exclusive titled Adrift, it was cancelled in 2011 and was later purchased by Capcom and resurrected as a multiplatform game?
 * Reworded it. The PS3-exclusivity actually went beyond the planning stages. –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)

Gameplay

 * This says that the game features puzzle aspects. The article currently doesn't mention puzzles until the reception.
 * ✅ –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)


 * the screen will glitch. I know that the source uses the word "glitch", but is there a different way to describe it? Maybe just putting quotation marks around it would work.
 * Wikilinked it to clarify. –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)


 * In terms of combat, the game allows players to create and customise their own move combos in the Combo Lab, which uses four categories of fighting moves called Pressens that players can reorganise by creating chains, earned through gaining PMP (Procedural Mastering Power), with a limit of four combos being active at any one time. This is a mouthful.
 * Improved flow. –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)


 * The special moves, S-Pressens, are made available to the player through the course of the game. Are you saying that more special moves unlock as the game goes on?
 * Yes, there are five unlockable S-Pressens. –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)

Setting

 * Section is fine

Story

 * It is then made known that Memorize scientist Doctor Quaid is trying to find a way to control the Leapers through their Sensens to create a private army for Memorize. Could you reword this?
 * ✅ –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)

Development

 * when the company was formed. What company?
 * ✅ –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Later, the Dontnod team thought up the concept. How about Later in 2008, the Dontnod team became interested in the concept of
 * The source does not specify a date, but will implement the rest. –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)
 * I just assumed because it says "a few months later" here. It's fine now, though.  Anarchyte  ( work  &#124;  talk )   08:08, 6 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Moris explained that the game, while some elements looked fantastical, was grounded in the real world. How about Moris explained that while some elements looked fantastical, the game was grounded in the real world
 * ✅ –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)

Reception

 * appreciated Dontnod Entertainment's work It's referred to as simple Dontnod for the majority of the article. Why change it now?
 * ✅ –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)


 * To Justin Speer of GameTrailers, Remember Me presented its concept with "fascinating" and "ridiculous" elements, while the manipulation of minds with the Memory Remix was stated as rewarding. Not a big fan of the word "to" here. Also, towards the end would it be better to write was described as rewarding?
 * ✅ –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)


 * instances to use it. Opportunities would be a better word here, IMO.


 * later parts of the story suffered from an amount of science fiction elements that disagreed with him. How about he said that the later parts of the story suffered from too many science fiction elements?
 * ✅ –Cognissonance (talk) 07:29, 6 June 2017 (UTC)

Other media

 * Section is fine

Sequel

 * Section is fine

Overall review
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

On hold for now until the issues mentioned above are fixed. Cheers,  Anarchyte  ( work  &#124;  talk )   05:58, 6 June 2017 (UTC)
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 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
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 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
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 * 1) Is it stable?
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 * Pass or Fail: (On hold)
 * Great work on the article. I have no issues with passing it. .  Anarchyte  ( work  &#124;  talk )   08:11, 6 June 2017 (UTC)