Talk:Renaissance Girls/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs) 04:25, 1 October 2016 (UTC)

Hello, my name is CaliforniaDreamsFan, and I'll be reviewing your article! Full review coming soon, so stay tuned!

Lead section

 * Remove "recorded" before "by Danish recording artist"; slight repetition.
 * Remove "solely" after "The track was"; repetition

Background and composition

 * Add "eponymous" before "second studio album", since you haven't actually notified the reader's name after the lead.
 * Add "her third record" before Wish Bone, and a comma before it as well.
 * Also, is it Dave Sitek or David Andrew Sitek? Be consistent through the article please.

Critical reception

 * Add "it" after called on the very last sentence for AllMusic.

Music video

 * What format was the video released on? YouTube? Vevo? Specify please.
 * You synopsis of the video bares no citations whatsoever; try and incorporate your YouTube (yes, I know its released on YouTube, but still) through the start and end of the paragraph please.
 * Remove "several" if there are only two critiques here (you can keep it if you intend to add more).

Release history

 * Small personal point cause it's not my cup-of-tea, but I would personally merge both the sub-headings into just Release history. It's well organised, but that's just my opinion.

Overall GA conclusion
A really good article! On hold for 7 days for additional editing. Please ping me for any inquires or when you have finished! Good luck
 * All done! Thank you so much once again! Carbrera (talk) 18:07, 1 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Passing! CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 07:43, 4 October 2016 (UTC)