Talk:Replanting Family Tree/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:47, 21 February 2021 (UTC)

This is the oldest albums GAN unreviewed, so I will take it on; aiming to have as many GANs as possible from the previous month or older wiped out! --K. Peake 08:47, 21 February 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Change type to EP / Remix album in the infobox; see 4: The Remix as a guideline
 * "on 18 September 2019 through" → "on 18 September 2019, through"
 * "It is the companion EP to" → "The EP is the companion release to"
 * Note the release year of the album either in brackets or using wording relevant to the previous sentence's mention of 2019
 * "The EP contains four remixes" → "The former contains four remixes"
 * "as a bonus track, co-written by the EP's sole producer," → "as a bonus track on it, co-written by the sole producer," with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT and you need to mention this in the body because the iTunes sources back it up
 * "it was distributed" → "the remix was distributed"
 * "were described as electropop tracks and are complete reworks of their" → "are electropop tracks and completely rework their"
 * Remove the generally favourable part because only two reviews of the EP are included; change to mentioning it being included on Winkel's list

Background and release

 * I have no issues with Oh Land being wikilinked here because she is one of two artists who collaborated on this album
 * The name of Oh Land's husband is not mentioned by either of the sources
 * "and a shift in sound for" → "and a shift in sound and tempo for" since the source offers a mention of this
 * "The album was officially announced" → "It was officially announced" because the preceding sentence ends with the album and the succeeding one starts with those words
 * "singles, and Oh Land embarked on a" → "singles as well as Oh Land embarking on a supporting" with the target
 * The tour is not sourced so try to back it up and remove "in support of Family Tree" once the above wording has been implemented to avoid repetition
 * "and created by" → "which was created by"
 * "Ultimately, The EP was" → "Ultimately, it was"
 * "on 18 September 2019 through" → "on 18 September 2019, through"
 * "to digital retailers." → "to digital retailers in various countries."
 * "of the E{," → "of the EP,"
 * "Replanting Family Tree, and" → "Replanting Family Tree and"
 * "In the US, the remix" → "In the United States, the remix"
 * "created by American musician Arthur Moon," → "created by Moon," because you have already mentioned his full name and he was introduced in the lead
 * It is not backed up by any of the iTunes sources that the song was originally intended for the album and you should mention that it is a bonus track at this point

Music and songs

 * Img looks good!
 * Remove target on remix
 * River Beatss → River Beats, as this is how apostrophes work when words end in s
 * The "electronic-heavy production" part is not sourced; only "Salt" is mentioned as electro
 * "explained the project's concept:" → "explained the concept:" to avoid useless repetition
 * "contains with four remixes of" → "contains four remixes of"
 * ""Human Error", and" → ""Human Error" and"
 * Target synth to Synthesizer
 * "The EP proceeds with" → "Replanting Family Tree proceeds with"
 * "just over 2 minutes" → "just over two minutes" per MOS:NUM
 * "On the parent album, Bartlett" → "On Family Tree, Bartlett"
 * Keep the part about the remix being stripped down but move the premiere info to background and release for focus
 * "as an ambient pop song" → "as an ambient pop remix" because it is talking about that version, not the original

Critical reception

 * Remove the opening sentence since there are not enough reviews to back that info up
 * "Keith awarded the EP a perfect 5 star rating, calling it a" → "Keith called the EP a" because the rating is in the box and you can add more of this review from the last para of the source

Track listing

 * You should use a different ref for the track listing to start with, then list "When a Hawk Comes By" as a bonus track using the Spotify ref
 * Would my addition of "Bonus Track" to the note parameter suffice? See . Carbrera (talk) 15:34, 22 February 2021 (UTC).
 * You should list it as a Spotify bonus track and add that ref in the sub-heading; see Graduation for example (apart from the lack of a ref) and use the other ref at the top of the standard track listing. --K. Peake 15:50, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
 * I don't think I understand why this is necessary, as while "When a Hawk Comes By" is referred to as a bonus track, it appears on all editions of the album, and not just Spotify. Carbrera (talk) 00:03, 25 February 2021 (UTC).

Credits and personnel

 * Good

Release history

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, but this is definitely in good shape for a EP article! --K. Peake 10:55, 21 February 2021 (UTC)
 * – thank you very much for another GA review. I believe I have addressed all of your comments within my edits. I would like to apologize for the some of the lazy edits I made that you had to point out. I need to be more careful. Thanks again, Carbrera (talk) 00:14, 25 February 2021 (UTC).
 * Good that you can learn from your mistakes as well as recognize them vocally, but you are correct about the track listing; I just did not know it was listed that way initially. ✅ now, did some slight copy editing to improve the lead prose though! --K. Peake 07:33, 25 February 2021 (UTC)