Talk:Reunion (30 Rock)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Beloved  Freak  22:19, 19 May 2010 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * Gave it a slight copyedit, just a couple of queries for clarity. A couple of tweaks in references.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * No problems
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Broad in coverage and focused.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Neutral
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * No problems
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * No problems
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * No dead links or links to disambiguation pages.
 * No dead links or links to disambiguation pages.

Plot

 * Could there be a bit of an explanation as to why Geiss was in a coma, or how long? (Just in this section, the lead's fine)
 * I think I got it. -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  14:25, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
 * It's not immediately clear why Jack is distraught that Geiss is remaining CEO; could you make it clearer that he was supposed to get the job (or whatever it is that's happening there!)
 * Added.
 * "For upstaging them, Tracy and Jenna start doing his page duties..." - this sentence is not quite right grammatically because it suggests that T & J did the upstaging. It needs something extra at the beginning, like To pay him back for upstaging them, Tracy and Jenna... or As revenge for upstaging them, Tracy and Jenna...
 * Done.

Cultural references

 * I didn't get the Obama reference, until I read her biog and saw that she went to Princeton. Could you clarify that? (remember your non-US audiences!)
 * Of course.
 * "often making out" - this sounds a bit too informal, but I don't have an immediate suggestion as you've just said "kissing". Unless, you just have something like Liz's former classmates play Seven minutes in heaven, a game in which two people are selected to go into a closet or other dark enclosed space and do whatever they like for seven minutes, often kissing.
 * Done.
 * "Later, Liz's classmates plan to Carrie her on stage..." - this is also informal, and a little obscure to the uninitiated, perhaps could be solved simply by quotation marks, like Later, Liz's classmates plan to "Carrie" her on stage
 * Done.
 * "The bucket of blood is dumped, but misses her entirely." - again, I feel that "dumped" is a bit informal, but feel free to disagree. Also, I think it's clearer if that sentence comes after the explanatory one (that begins "This is a reference to...")
 * I just removed it. The way I see it, it's better not to have it like that. IMO. IDK. What do you think?
 * Yeah, that's fine. I agree.-- Beloved Freak  14:42, 20 May 2010 (UTC)