Talk:Revelations of the Dark Mother/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Abryn (talk · contribs) 00:50, 6 April 2020 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * "Like The Book of Nod, it has a "vampire scholar" framing device and makes heavy use of illustration, and has the same verse structure" to "Like The Book of Nod, it has a "vampire scholar" framing device; it makes heavy use of illustration and has the same verse structure."
 * Done--AlexandraIDV 05:22, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "on the character of Lilith" to "on the character Lilith"
 * Done--AlexandraIDV 05:22, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "with Lilith—Caine opposing Adam—Abel as both husband-and-wife/brother-and-brother and stepmother-and-stepson/father-and-son, serving as analogies for opposing life styles – hunting/blood-spilling and gardening/blood-spilling – and adding oppositions of magical/mundane, darkness/light, and wilderness/garden." I don't undertstand the Lilith-Caine opposing Adam-Abel part.
 * Tried to rewrite it, it's kinda hard to parse in the source and I ended up mirroring how it was presented there.--AlexandraIDV 05:22, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

That's it. Once these are addressed I can pass. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 01:02, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I've tried to address the issues you brought up; also ended up splitting the first reception paragraph in two since it was getting kinda long.--AlexandraIDV 05:23, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * All righty, passed. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 07:41, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you~! ^_^--AlexandraIDV 07:46, 6 April 2020 (UTC)