Talk:Reversible!/GA1

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Reviewer: Abryn (talk · contribs) 09:16, 6 July 2021 (UTC)


 * Oh yeah, forgot to do the review. I found only extremely minor, optional changes, nothing worth holding up the review. Mostly preference. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 09:47, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

For anyone looking at this in the future: Abryn and I talked through Discord while she reviewed this, and she then forgot to post the comments here. I will include them for the record:

Dusa — Today at 11:16 AM "It was originally serialized by Ichijinsha in their magazine Waai! from April 24, 2010 to November 25, 2013, and has since also been collected in three tankōbon volumes; together with Sazanami Cherry, it was the first manga published under the Waai! Comics imprint. "

I sometimes second-guess myself, but is that semicolon appropriate?

Dusa — Today at 11:20 AM lead's good actually maybe consider mentioning why they're encouraged to crossdress in the lead? as it is, it frames the reasoning as nebulous or nonexistent

Dusa — Today at 11:22 AM Premise is good

Dusa — Today at 11:24 AM Production good

Dusa — Today at 11:26 AM in the second volume summary, are the students from the same school?

Alexandra IDV — Today at 11:27 AM Yeah, it all takes place at St Stokesia until it mentions the winter break

Dusa — Today at 11:28 AM gotcha Volumes good

Dusa — Today at 11:29 AM "found it to stand" > "felt it stood"

Alexandra IDV — Today at 11:29 AM (I'll check when I'm at my pc but I trust your judgment)

Dusa — Today at 11:30 AM i mean i think they're both fine, but the latter is a little less wordy while communicating the same thing

Alexandra IDV — Today at 11:30 AM Mmm As long as things still are clear I also tend to prefer more concise wording

Dusa — Today at 11:31 AM "how the manga stands out" > "how the manga stood out" ; again i have a dumb baby brain sometimes, but i think because of the tense in other parts of the sentence, this part should be past tense as well other than that, Reception good

Dusa — Today at 11:32 AM honestly i'm just gonna pass it, nothing i said was a big deal, you can change to my suggestions if you want to

--AlexandraIDV 13:25, 6 July 2021 (UTC)