Talk:Rhapsomates/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Buidhe (talk · contribs) 06:17, 29 March 2024 (UTC)

Working (t &#183; c)  buidhe  06:17, 29 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Some initial thoughts:
 * I'm not sure the lead meets MOS:LEAD. I would try adding a few sentences to make sure the article's main points are represented. For example, as it is there's no summary of the aftermath section.

I have expanded the lede.--Catlemur (talk) 02:25, 1 April 2024 (UTC)
 * "Doukas was forced to land his troops and fight a protracted campaign" Since no one is "forcing" him to do it, I think this needs to be reworded, to something like: "Because the revolt continued, Doukas landed troops and began what would become a protracted campaign".
 * "Rhapsomates and the Immortals involved in the rising..." this is part of the aftermath, surely?
 * Moved to Aftermath.--Catlemur (talk) 00:54, 30 March 2024 (UTC)
 * "suggesting that the revolt might have been directed at Alexios' fiscal policies" is this found in other sources? Otherwise it might be correct to attribute the historian making this connection
 * As mentioned in the article Cypriot historian Costas Kyrris also supports this theory.--Catlemur (talk) 00:54, 30 March 2024 (UTC)
 * "Savvides, Alexis" source is not cited currently
 * Moved to Further reading.--Catlemur (talk) 00:54, 30 March 2024 (UTC)
 * (t &#183; c)  buidhe  14:23, 29 March 2024 (UTC)
 * (t &#183; c)  buidhe  14:23, 29 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Images review : pass
 * Sources review : pass (t &#183; c)  buidhe  22:32, 31 March 2024 (UTC)