Talk:Rhode Island banking crisis/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Barkeep49 (talk · contribs) 01:37, 9 December 2018 (UTC)

Review

 * Suggest listing Mollicone as bank President, not manager, given that the latter can mean overall in charger or a more mid-level person while President was his actual title ✅
 * The location of Heritage Loan & Investment failure does not appear to be sourced ✅
 * I really like the muffin quote ✅ :)
 * When Mollicone realized authorities had caught on Sourcing seems to suggest that he was told authorities had been alerted by RISDIC not that he'd figured it out on his own ✅
 * It continued to expand through the 1980s, enabled by more lax state and federal laws. This isn't directly sourced (and needn't be) but is presumably sourced to the New England Economic Review. Can you point to me where it draws this conclusion?
 * Starts with the last paragraph of the left column on page 4, going through the decreased oversight, increased limits, etc. Does it not seem like a fair summary?
 * Ok that's what I figured but wanted to make sure I wasn't missing something. I would say lax is a conclusion (one person's lax might be another person's stringent) and would suggest changing to loosening or the like to avoid the issue altogether (more lax is ostensibly true but a different word avoids any sort of imputed judgement) Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 04:50, 10 December 2018 (UTC) ✅


 * Jefferson used up a great deal of RISDIC's resources, leaving them in particularly bad shape when the even more costly Heritage collapse came about. Should have an in-line cite ✅
 * I'm curious about how you've chosen to organize. You start off with Heritage and it's failure and then go back in time to examine RISDIC.
 * It's according to the way events played out in coverage of the subject. Heritage Loan failed then RISDIC failed. But explaining the latter benefits from additional context which requires reaching a little further back. Since those older accounts are less relevant to the banking crisis itself (and especially to coverage thereof), it didn't make sense to me to try to make it overall chronological. &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 19:25, 9 December 2018 (UTC)


 * By state law, banks and credit unions cannot legally operate without insurance. needs an in-line cite since it's not clear which of the three cittaions which follow is the source for this fact. ✅
 * Since we don't have an article on NCUA, suggest FDIC and NCUA be spelled out in first usage
 * We do have one -- I just accidentally swapped association in for administration. FDIC is spelled out in first instance already, so I fixed the link and spelled out NCUA. Maybe slightly awkward to have one acronym and one spelled out but meh. ✅


 * Would suggest moving the Whitehouse picture down to the hearing section where there is accompanying text for him ✅
 * According to The New York Times, the banking crisis was the major catalyst in an "ethics movement" or even "citizen revolt" against corruption in Rhode Island. needs a cite to the NYT ✅
 * Under resolution think it would be worth saying 25 of the 36 ✅
 * Is it helpful to move the first mention of DiPrete to the possible connections section (it doesn't seem strictly necessary to say who Sundlun was replacing)? The Wikilink to his name there feels more helpful. The note that he was later jailed for unrelated crimes also seems a bit of guilt by association which is why the link to his name there could allow a curious reader to more easily discover that. ✅
 * Similar guilt by inference question about Cianci ✅
 * I just removed the line about Cianci. It indeed didn't add much beyond implication.


 * Most wanted fugitive needs in-line citation ✅

Discussion

 * Taking review. confirming you remain interested in doing a GA process? Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 01:37, 9 December 2018 (UTC)
 * Confirmed! Thanks for taking it on! &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 02:27, 9 December 2018 (UTC)

I have completed my review of the article text above and have now completed checking other elements of GA (e.g. photos). Once the changes have been completed I'll do one more read through but think this is close to being ready. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 21:23, 11 December 2018 (UTC)
 * Great! I think I addressed all of the above now. &mdash; Rhododendrites  talk \\ 02:20, 12 December 2018 (UTC)