Talk:Richard Alston (gridiron football)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bcschneider53 (talk · contribs) 17:50, 5 June 2017 (UTC)

Grabbing this one for a review as I promised I'd do at least one of these. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 17:50, 5 June 2017 (UTC)

Lead

 * "is a former professional gridiron football wide receiver" should this be "is an American former professional"?
 * I could add that, but I think it would make the sentence confusing. The most popular form of gridiron football is American football, so "is an American former professional gridiron football ..." causes a bit of a double-take. Many of our leads in this topic area read "is a former professional American football ...". Also, since he played his entire relevant professional career in Canada, Alston's nationality doesn't really define his notability and may be best included outside the lead. Let me know if you still think the nationality should be added. ~ Rob 13 Talk 22:52, 5 June 2017 (UTC)
 * No problem. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 22:56, 5 June 2017 (UTC)
 * I understand this is a short article, but is there any way the lead could be expanded by at least a sentence or two?
 * ✅ ~ Rob 13 Talk 22:52, 5 June 2017 (UTC)

College career

 * No issues.

Professional career

 * "Alston didn't make the Browns' regular season roster" -> did not
 * ✅ ~ Rob 13 Talk 22:52, 5 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "While he wasn't valuable to the Browns at wide receiver," -> was not, feel free to disagree but I think it would look best in prose if the contractions were avoided.
 * ✅ ~ Rob 13 Talk 22:52, 5 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Is there any information on him post-2008? Even if it's just a couple of personal life updates, if they can be found, they could be useful in expanding the article slightly. No worries if nothing can be found though.
 * Zero hits after 2008 on the site I use for research, sadly (LexisNexis - academic database with a good volume of Canadian newspapers). I've also looked at Newspapers.com and found nothing more recent than 2006. This is very common for CFL players who aren't all-stars, unfortunately. Once their career is over, they drop off the face of the earth until they pass away, at which point you can usually find an obituary. ~ Rob 13 Talk 22:52, 5 June 2017 (UTC)