Talk:Richard Henry Park/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:56, 27 October 2020 (UTC)

Going to be reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 20:56, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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Lead

 * Wikilink Vice President of the United States
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:45, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "He did a sculpture of Milwaukee's first white settler and first mayor. He also created sculptures for the Chicago World's Fair of 1893." - consider merging these two sentences together
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:45, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Life and career

 * "Park was born February 17, 1838," - born on February
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "working as an assistant to Palmer[3] alongside other future sculptors Launt Thompson[4] and Charles Calverley.[5]" - commas will be need to be added before each of the citations
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "He moved to New York city to establish an independent career before moving to Florence, Italy around 1871." - the word in bold begins with a capital letter
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Milwaukee on the first mention
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Park's early work was in marble, later changing to the medium of bronze for natural sculptures, in line with the American trend for late nineteenth century sculptures." - sentence will need to be verified by a reliable source
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "he moved his studio to Chicago to get commissions in the sculptural programs for the Chicago World's Fair of 1893." - wikilink the text in bold to the appropriate article
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Park's apprentice and assistant (1891-1894)." - assistant from 1891 to 1894.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Montana
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Remarkably, given his history with the family," - the word highlighted in bold is non-netural
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink rotunda to [[Rotunda (architecture)}]
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "It has been suggested that Park's most enduring legacy may be his role as mentor and teacher to Lawrie." - suggested by whom?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "He is best known for his Actor's Monument to Edgar Allan Poe (1884) in the Metropolitan Museum of Art in New York city, and the Drake Fountain in Chicago (1892)." - sentence will require a reliable source to verify that it is correct
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Also for the above sentence, the parentheses can be removed and the sentence be reworded accordingly
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:07, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Dimmick's view is confirmed by his obituary in the Chicago Tribune dated November 8, 1902, which states he died "at the "Battle Creek sanitarium." - sentence needs to be verified by a reliable source
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:07, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Chicago Tribune can be wikilinked
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Washington monument, 1885

 * "at a cost of around $20,000[23]" - a comma is missing before the citation
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:42, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "restorer Andrzej Dajnowski discovered major cracking in one of the legs " - what caused the cracking?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:42, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Juneau Monument, 1887

 * "having been the area's first white settler and the first Mayor of the city." - the city's first Mayor.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:09, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "The monument cost around $25,000 (equivalent to $641,000 in 2019)[24]" - a comma is missing before the citation
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:09, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "and depicts Juneau "clothed in the habit of the pioneer"[32]" - same issue as above
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:09, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Strong similarities have been noted between the sculpture's visage and that of Park's Washington statue." - noted by whom?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:09, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Newspaper and web

 * askArt ""Richard Park (1832-1902)"" - the hyphen needs to be replaced by an en dash
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:01, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Be consistent in how Milwaukee Journal Sentinel is written; it should be either Milwaukee Journal Sentinel or The Milwaukee Journal Sentinel
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:01, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 08:08, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:15, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:01, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:53, 28 October 2020 (UTC)