Talk:Richard Rennison/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 22:00, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. I'll begin with a close readthrough of the text in the next few days, noting any initial issues on this review page, and then will start the criteria checklist. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:00, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

Initial readthrough
This is a well-written and well-sourced article about a charming bit of history; I only have a few small quibbles.


 * "Marriage (Scotland) Act 1939" is this the proper name of the act? The mid-phrase parenthetical seems a little unusual.
 * "claimed to have" -- avoid "claimed" per WP:WTA; perhaps just "stated that he had" (or see below)
 * "were provided by the blacksmiths as he was certain" -- fix change of plural to singular on blacksmiths/he
 * "1939 Marriage act in Scotland" -- capitalization and word order is different here than above; probably best to make it consistent.
 * "When the new law came into force in 1940, Rennison had performed 5,147 marriages" -- in the lead, the prose appears to be hedging its bets, attributing this statement only to Rennison; here it's presented as fact. The Glasgow Herald appears to say this flatly, so I'd say it's okay to do the same in the lead, unless you have reason to doubt Rennison's statement.

Since this one is so close, I'll go ahead and start the checklist now. -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:30, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
 * All sorted (I hope). The odd parenthesis are indeed the official name, it's a weird custom of the British parliamentary system, when dealing with a specific country within the United Kingdom. I've updated the later version to match it. The 5,147 figure I've seen in a number of sources, including postcards, books and newspapers, so I'm happy to update the lead to be firm. Thanks for your time reviewing this! Worm TT( talk ) 12:06, 6 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Yep, that does the trick. -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:26, 6 January 2013 (UTC)