Talk:Richard Riot/GA1

GA Review
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JKBrooks85 (talk) 03:33, 10 February 2011 (UTC)

Good work by the authors and editors involved. I've given the article a thorough copy edit, but had a few questions.
 * I added a fact tag where a citation needs to be repeated or added
 * Fixed


 * there was one instance where it was unclear to what a pronoun was referring.
 * Not sure where this is
 * There's a "who?" tag for it, if that helps you point it out.


 * I also wasn't sure if the protesters were throwing ice chunks at streetcars or cars on the street; the original text was "street cars", and I changed that to streetcars.
 * Streetcars is correct.

I also switched the order of the paragraphs talking about Boston police's attempt to arrest Richard and the one about the fine; they seemed to flow in chronological order that way.
 * I moved the match penalty and resulting fine before the attempted arrest as the penalty would have been assets immediately and the fine was automatic.--Mo Rock...Monstrous (leech44) 06:19, 10 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Could you mention that in the paragraph? That would clear up why it was in that order. JKBrooks85 (talk) 07:02, 10 February 2011 (UTC)

Drop me a line when you've addressed the problems, and I'll be happy to pass it.

Reviewer: JKBrooks85 (talk) 03:33, 10 February 2011 (UTC)