Talk:Right There (Nicole Scherzinger song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:51, 19 July 2022 (UTC)

I will start reviewing this today, however it may run into tomorrow. --K. Peake 07:51, 19 July 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * WP:OVERLINK of Jim Jonsin in the producer(s) parameter


 * "Nicole Scherzinger, taken frm her debut" → "Nicole Scherzinger from her debut"


 * "It was released on" → "The song was released on" but it is not written out in prose that the song was released under the labels


 * "as the third single from Killer Love, it was remixed to feature" → "as the third single, a remix was recorded featuring"


 * Remove duplicate usage of "Written by"


 * "Daniel Morris and co-written and" → "Daniel Morris, and co-written and"


 * ""Right There" island-flavored midtempo" → "it is an island-flavored midtempo"


 * Remove the selection for release sentence since that is not notable here


 * ""Right There" was intended to be" → "The song was originally intended to be" moving this to be the sentence before the writing/comp one


 * "urban production which stood out from the disco-tinged songs" → "urban production, which stood out from the mainstream songs" to be more consistent with the body


 * "for its playful nature" → "for the playful nature"


 * Remove the release year of "Rude Boy" since this is not notable for the lead


 * Remove the "Edge of Seventeen" comparison because that is only mentioned by one reviewer


 * "by calling the song a" → "by calling it a"


 * "In the UK, "Right There" debuted at number three, giving Scherzinger her third consecutive top three single" → "In the United Kingdom, the song debuted at number three, giving Scherzinger her fourth consecutive top-ten single" per what the body actually says


 * "It also peaked in the top-ten" → "Outside of the UK, the song peaked in the top-ten" per this being a new para


 * "New Zealand and on" → "New Zealand, and on"


 * Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)


 * Wikilink Euro Digital Songs per MOS:LINK2SECT, also make sure this and any other chart positions are written out in prose
 * "within the top-forty on" → "within the top 40 on" per MOS:NUM


 * ""Right There" was certified 2× Platinum by the" → "The song was certified double platinum in Australia by the"


 * "Gold in the UK by the British Phonographic Industry (BPI) and in the US by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA)." → "gold in both the UK and the US by the British Phonographic Industry (BPI) and Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA), respectively."


 * Remove the year-end charts, as these aren't notable here


 * Merge the fourth para with the third per overly short size


 * Merely cut the first music video sentence to stating it was directed by Paul Hunter, as nobody wants to read background info in the lead


 * ""Right There" was the most watched video on YouTube on its day of" → "The visual was the most watched video on YouTube on the day of" removing the Billboard part, as it is not notable who reported that in the lead


 * "while MTV also gave the song a similar accolade on its website too." → "while it scored a similar accolade on MTV's website." with the wikilink


 * Mention what year(s) the performances were in


 * I've gotten up to here for now. Got a bit more to do re: charts. >> Lil-unique1  (  talk  ) — 20:52, 19 July 2022 (UTC)
 * >> Lil-unique1  (  talk  ) — 16:10, 26 July 2022 (UTC)

Background and release

 * Remove the captions from the group of images and instead identify by placing (left) after Jim Jonsion's name and (right) after 50 Cent


 * "would go on to top charts in the UK in" → "would go on to top the chart in"


 * "or third overall when" → "though was her third overall when"


 * "with the Pussycat Dolls." → "with the Pussycat Dolls." with the wikilink (keeping as is per MOS:THEMUSIC


 * "a month later it was confirmed that "Right There", helmed by" → "a month later, it was confirmed that "Right There", produced by"


 * "but also the lead and first single for" → "but also the lead single for" with the wikilink, as lead means first single


 * "was penned for" → "was scheduled for"


 * "reported that Jonsin was set work with" → "reported that Jim Jonsin was set to work with" per this not being his real name:
 * Remove the "Coconut Tree" feature since that is not notable at all


 * "On April 1, 2011, "Right There" was" → "On April 1, the song was"


 * "began getting airplay on" → "began garnering airplay on"


 * Mention the labels at the point of release


 * "A week later it was serviced" → "A week later, the song was serviced"


 * Pipe rhythmic radio to Rhythmic contemporary


 * Remove later in June from the start of the sentence since the June dates are all mentioned there anyway


 * ""He Goes Down" which samples" → ""He Goes Down", which samples" with the pipe


 * ""house music bassline."" → ""house music bassline"." per MOS:QUOTE

Recording and production

 * ""Right There" is a" → "Musically, "Right There" is a" moving the genres to music and lyrics, though keep this sentencew ith the writing part only here


 * "by Jonsin for" → "by Jim Jonsin for"


 * Remove excess full-stop after Harvey Mason Jr. since his name can end the sentence in this context


 * "at The Record Plant in" → "at the Record Plant in"


 * Pipe programming to Programming (music)


 * "with guitars and bass by" → "and guitars and bass by"


 * "David Boyd and Michael Daley" → "David Boyd, and Michael Daley"


 * Pipe North Hollywood to North Hollywood, Los Angeles

Music and lyrics

 * Make the genres sentence the first of this section


 * The MTV and Rap-Up sentences should come before the Digital Spy one since they are about the comp


 * "twang" which complimented" → "twang", which compliments"


 * Mention the name of the MTV Buzzworthy writer


 * "the song was built on an" → "the song is built on an"


 * "It was compared to being a similar technique and vibe to" → "It was seen as a similar technique and vibe to"


 * Mention the name of the Rap-Up writer


 * "Among the lyrics are the lines" → "Among the lyrics are" and this sentence should have the Digital Spy one directly before it


 * "my body" which segues" → "my body", which segues"


 * Remove duplicate wikilink on Destiny's Child

Critical reception

 * "AOL Radio's Nadine Cheung praised "Right There"" → "Cheung praised "Right There""


 * "and "uncanny lyrical references"." → "and an "uncanny lyrical reference"." per the source


 * "MTV's Eliot Glazier agreed with this notion," → "Glazier agreed with this notion,"


 * Pipe disco to Nu-disco


 * 4 Music → 4Music with the wikilink


 * "of the best bits of the album." → "of the highlights of the album."


 * ""better and polite version of" → ""better and polite version" of"


 * "Lewis Corner of Digital Spy awarded the song" → "Corner awarded the song"


 * "five stars describing it" → "five stars, describing it"


 * "rating and commented that" → "rating and commented," however, the source does not mention this song


 * "ecky Bain of Idolator agreed saying" → "Becky Bain of Idolator agreed, saying"


 * "to this song." However she said," → "to this song". However, she said," per MOS:QUOTE


 * Italicise DJ Booth


 * "However not all reviews were positive," → "However, not all reviews were positive."


 * "He also said that the song" → "He said that the song" per also being used in the quote


 * "sound like DIY instructions."" → "sound like DIY instructions"."


 * "wrote that the "Scherzinger" → "wrote that "Scherzinger"


 * "cod-Jamaican 'Right There'."" → "cod-Jamaican 'Right There'"."


 * "of Pop Dust was unimpressed of the song criticizing for" → "of Popdust was unimpressed with the song for"


 * "and lazy lyrics."" → "and lazy lyrics"."


 * Pipe ITV1 to ITV (TV channel)


 * Mention when the interview was

Commercial performance

 * Per the rules on chart positions being ordered geographically, make the US stuff the first para and follow that with the other countries; Canada should succeed it, but the current order of the other countries following these two would be fine. Also, remember what I said previously about how any chart positions mentioned in the lead must be written out here too.


 * "number fifty-eight on the UK Singles Chart on the chart dated" → "number 58 on the UK Singles Chart for the issue dated" per MOS:NUM


 * "fourth week it leaped from number fourteen to number three selling" → "fourth week, the song lept from number fourteen to number three, selling"


 * [32] should only be invoked every two sentences per WP:OVERCITE


 * "top ten single as a solo artist behind" → "top-ten single as a solo artist, following"


 * "with The Pussycat Dolls, it is her eighteenth top-forty" → "with the Pussycat Dolls, it is her 18th top-40"


 * "of 200,000 copies of the single." → "of 200,000 copies in the UK."


 * "in the United Kingdom and was one of the bestselling" → "in the UK and was one of the best-selling" but the copies are not sourced


 * "remained on the chart" → "remained on the UK Singles Chart"


 * "In Ireland "Right There" debuted at number twenty-two" → "In Ireland, "Right There" debuted at number 22"


 * "number seven where it remained in the top ten" → "number seven and it remained in the top-ten"


 * "at number thirty-four" → "at number 34"


 * Pipe New Zealand Singles Chart to Official New Zealand Music Chart


 * "on its fifth week peaking" → "in its fifth week, peaking"


 * "number forty on the Australian Singles Chart o" → "number 40 on the ARIA Singles Chart on" with the pipe


 * "at number eight staying for" → "at number eight on the chart, staying there for"


 * "been certified 2x platinum" → "been certified double platinum"


 * "140,000 copies of the single." → "140,000 copies in Australia."


 * "In the United States, the song" → "In the US, the song" per MOS:US


 * "debuted on the Billboard Hot 100 chart on June 4, 2011, at number 77," → "debuted at number 77 on the Billboard Hot 100 chart on June 4, 2011,"
 * "first chart solo entry" → "first solo chart entry"


 * The fall to number 97 is not sourced; an entirely different trajectory is mentioned by the ref


 * "on the Hot 100, it stayed at" → "on the Hot 100; the song stayed at"


 * Remove the due to downloads part from the start of the sentence because this is implied


 * "on the Hot Digital Songs on" → "on the Hot Digital Songs chart for" with the pipe


 * Pipe Hot Dance Club Songs to Dance Club Songs


 * "shipments of over 500,000 copies." → "selling 500,000 certified units in the US."


 * "peaked at number forty four." → "peaked at number 44."

Live performances

 * Remove wikilink on 50 Cent


 * Wikilink American Idol


 * "a team of ten backup dancers" → "a team of 10 backup dancers" per MOS:NUM


 * "jeans and dangling chain," → "jeans, and dangling chain,"


 * Mention Kaufman as being of MTV


 * "hula as "seductive."" → "hula as "seductive"." per MOS:QUOTE


 * "saying that "The ex-Pussycat Doll heated up" → "saying that Scherzinger "heated up"


 * "performing [her] single."" → "performing [her] single"."


 * Introduce Amy Sciarretto


 * "praised Nicole Scherzinger's performance complimenting on her" → "praised Scherzinger's performance, complimenting her"


 * "Sciarretto said "Scherzinger’s" → "Sciarretto said, "Scherzinger's"


 * "In June, Scherzinger" → "In June 2011, Scherzinger" but the source does not mention that she flew there and change to the UK


 * "black ankle boots."" → "black ankle boots"."


 * "by musician Mike Stock who described Scherzinger's performance" → "by musician Mike Stock, who described it"


 * "she performed it again" → "Scherzinger performed it again"


 * Pipe Capital FM to Capital (radio network)


 * "Summertime Ball performing" → "Summertime Ball, performing"


 * ""Don't Cha" and "Right There"." → ""Don't Cha", and "Right There"."


 * "in the United States first performing" → "in the US, first performing" per MOS:US


 * Pipe eighth season to So You Think You Can Dance (American season 8)


 * Pipe So You Think You Can Dance to So You Think You Can Dance (American TV series)


 * Remove wikilink on Rap-Up


 * "described the whole performance. "Dressed" → "described the whole performance: "Dressed"

Background and synopsis

 * Wikilink music video on the img text and first mention in prose


 * Remove wikilink on Los Angeles


 * "on "Whatever You Like"." → "on the visual for "Whatever You Like"."


 * "Scherzinger in interview to MTV News she said," → "In an interview with MTV News, she said,"


 * Pipe Belvedere to Belvedere Vodka


 * "premiered on VEVO.com on" → "premiered through Vevo on" with the wikilink


 * "premiered the same day, one" → "premiered the same day: one"


 * "with 50 Cent saying, He" → "with 50 Cent, saying, "He"


 * Remove wikilink on music video


 * Remove wikilink on 50 Cent


 * Shouldn't things like the green screen have sources for them?


 * "As the first verse begins Scherzinger" → "As the first verse begins, Scherzinger"


 * "walking on a ghostly downtown" → "as she walks around a ghostly downtown"


 * Wikilink Pocahontas


 * "space-turned-nightclub" this reads weirdly – please clarify


 * "is a closeup of Scherzinger," → "is a closeup of her,"

Reception

 * Remove pipe on Idolator


 * "liked the video stating, "'Right There' is upbeat," → "liked the video, stating it "is upbeat,"


 * "video should be."" → "video should be"." per MOS:QUOTE


 * Italicise Buzzworthy


 * "reminded that she used to lead the..." → "reminded him that Scherzinger used to be the lead singer of the Pussycat Dolls." to be less wordy


 * "negatively criticized of 50 Cent's appearance" → "negatively criticized 50 Cent's appearance"


 * "of product placement of Belvedere calling it "bit much" but she later writes" → "of product placement, calling it a "bit much", but she later wrote"


 * "and totally silly fashion."" → "and totally silly fashion"."


 * "commented, "effortless moves" → "commented that "effortless moves"


 * "at number forty-nine on" → "at number 49 on" per MOS:NUM


 * Remove wikilink on MTV


 * "was one of the most watched music video" → "was one of the most watched music videos"

Track listing

 * Pipe Dave Spoon to Simon Neale

Credits and personnel

 * Remove img since this is not necessary to show the recording studio


 * Shouldn't 50 Cent and any other personnel besides Scherzinger be wikilinked?


 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Weekly charts

 * List of record charts and positions → Chart performance for "Right There"


 * The Romanian position is not sourced

Year-end charts

 * Australia (ARIA) Urban Singles → Australia Urban (ARIA)

Certifications

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION]

Release history

 * Add a separate col for the refs


 * Pipe Universal Music to Universal Music Group


 * I don't think the additional [106] is needed for the United States


 * Split contemporary and rhythmic radio into two separate rows

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; this is a bit messy but should be sorted soon! --K. Peake 12:59, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi @Kyle Peake, not surprised it was a met. I was trying to c/e it from original 2013 state! It was my intention to pick this up this evening but I've come down with the dreaded Miss C'Vid (* insert expletive here *). Its making it tricky for me to concentrate etc, hence I've been online doing more mundane things. I'll have to revisit this in a couple of days. Please bear with... >> Lil-unique1  (  talk  ) — 21:42, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Oh that is not good at all, I hope you get well soon and I understand you not going over this article currently. --K. Peake 05:47, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * It is good to see that you have started to make considerable progress on this article, however the names of authors repeated in reception can keep the publications but should only have their surnames since these are supposed to be used once. --K. Peake 11:18, 2 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your patience @Kyle Peake. I think I've done all these now including addressing your point above. >> Lil-unique1  (  talk  ) — 20:18, 2 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Nice job, but you still need to wikilink Euro Digital Songs per MOS:LINK2SECT, fix MOS:QUOTE issues especially in reception, change the twang/complimented part and remove or replace Muumuuse.com per WP:SELFPUB. --K. Peake 07:52, 3 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Ah - muumuuuse.com is allowed because the author Bradley Stern is a reliable source. He has written multiple times for MTV and NME which means it is allowed- Self-published expert sources may be considered reliable when produced by an established subject-matter expert, whose work in the relevant field has previously been published by reliable, independent publications. I'll get to the other stuff later today. >>  Lil-unique1  (  talk  ) — 08:08, 3 August 2022 (UTC)
 * That is acceptable and I am glad you will sort out the rest, however that ref still has MOS:QWQ issues. K. Peake 08:13, 3 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Sorted >>  Lil-unique1  (  talk  ) — 14:34, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
 * You still need to follow MOS:LINK2SECT --K. Peake 06:47, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * If this was about Euro Digital songs, all instances are wikilinked to Billboard charts. I've found one further instance of Popcrush which wasn't linked. >> Lil-unique1  (  talk  ) — 08:06, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * You are supposed to link to itself when the article redirects to a section. --K. Peake 20:05, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * So the opposite of what I did then i.e. use Euro Digital Songs as the link instead of Euro Digital Songs ? >> Lil-unique1  (  talk  ) — 20:30, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, you have got it spot on here! --K. Peake 06:46, 9 August 2022 (UTC)