Talk:Rin Tin Tin/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:16, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's a first pass, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 15:21, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " in Flirey France who" commas.
 * "in 1958 and in 1959" in both 1958 and 1959.
 * "After Leonard died in 2006" repetitive, perhaps "After Leonard's death in 2006"
 * Is Preservation breeding a relevant link here when you talk of keeping the bloodline?
 * " (Duncan had never done so)," unnecessary as you've just said Hereford was the first to do so.
 * "The current Rin Tin Tin XII dog" ->"The current dog, Rin Tin Tin XII, ..."
 * What's an "aerial gunner"?
 * "subject to bombs" subjected
 * "Duncan rescued the dogs and brought them back to his unit." unref.
 * " he kept one of " -> "one puppy of"
 * "Duncan, Rin Tin Tin, and Nanette II settled at his home in Los Angeles. Rin Tin Tin was a dark sable color and had very dark eyes. Nanette II was much lighter in color." unref.
 * Link Strongheart in the main body.
 * "of respected film" according to whom?
 * Link "key to the city" to Freedom of the City.
 * Link those dog foods, e.g. Ken-L Ration.
 * "was the most popular actor with the very sophisticated film audience in Berlin." in whose opinion?!
 * "the Academy " link it.
 * " Rin Tin Tin and the rest of the crew filmed ..." unref.
 * "Rin Tin Tin and Nanette produced ..." Nanette II?
 * "the death was given a wide variety of fabrications"-> "aspects of his death were fabricated"
 * "the famous" no need.
 * Filmography tables could use row and col scopes and a caption per MOS:DTT.
 * Some entries across tables missing refs.
 * Title and Role seem to sort three different ways.
 * "Junior appeared in several films ... " unref.
 * "Story lines" ->" Storylines"
 * "A fictionalized account " unref.
 * Reference date format should be consistent.
 * NY Times -> The New York Times
 * Be consistent with format and linking publishers/works.


 * Thanks for picking up the review! I will address the issues in the next day or two. Binksternet (talk) 16:20, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm about halfway through these points. I corrected Duncan's military position to the formal term armourer – the person who maintains the guns. He embellished his role in many interviews but author Susan Orleans punctures the puffery. I didn't think preservation breeding was so appropriate, as that topic is about saving precious and rare genes, but this case is just thoroughbred breeding lines for continuity and marketing. Binksternet (talk) 01:55, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Okay, done with this first pass. I discovered a mistake in the two Houston Chronicle refs: both were linking to the same URL. Binksternet (talk) 05:52, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Tables still need work, per this edit of mine needing to be replicated across all of them. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 20:09, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Tables have always been a mystery to me. I flail away at them until they don't look completely wrong, usually by copying some markup from somewhere else. This morning over coffee, my wife the CSS whiz and HTML developer helped me through some table markup struggles at the Jim Brickman biography, but I probably miswired parts of it. Back to this GA review: Let me know if there is further work to do. Binksternet (talk) 21:21, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * All good! I did the last single-row table.  A nice article and certainly per Wikipedia, a good one.  So I'm promoting, nice work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 21:28, 7 March 2021 (UTC)