Talk:Ring Line (Oslo)/GA1

GA Review
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Comments: I am placing the article on hold. Dough4872 (talk) 20:30, 16 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) In the last sentence in the first paragraph of the lead, you use "connects" twice.
 * 2) In first sentence of next paragraph, no comma needed after "1980s".
 * 3) The sentences "A projection for the line was presented in 1991 by Oslo Sporveier. The line was estimated to have 54,000 riders each day." can be combined.
 * 4) In sentence "In 1992, the tram division of Oslo Sporveier launched an alternative Ring Line, that would have been built as a light rail, using in part the existing tramway.", comma not needed after "Ring Line".
 * 5) "it would have 38 instead of 16 stops, and a travel time of 34 instead of 22 minutes": change to "it would have 38 stops instead of 16 stops, and a travel time of 34 mintues instead of 22 minutes"
 * 6) "at grade" should be hyphenated.
 * 7) In sentence "Also the Norwegian Public Roads Administration protested to the plans, and stated that funding should be allocated to upgrading Ring 3 to six lanes before public transport investments were made in the area", add comma after "also".
 * 8) "were agreed of the distribution of funding" sounds awkward.
 * 9) The sentence "Not until March 2000 did the city council except the guarantees from the state for part of the funding." needs to be reworded.
 * 10) In the second-to-last paragraph of the history section, there are many short sentences. Can these be combined?
 * 11) In sentence "A report published by the city in 2007 declared the line a success, and that all goals for the line had been exceeded.", remove comma after "success".
 * 12) Remove comma after "2007" in next sentence.
 * 13) What is "BI"?
 * 14) "The ring" sounds colliqual.
 * 15) "increased the daily number of public transport trips with 11,000" sounds awkward.
 * 16) "The station at Storo at the entrance to the tunnel." is a sentence fragment.
 * 17) Can you combine some of the shorter sentences in the Route section such as "It also serves as a bus hub."?
 * 18) "The Hasle Line is proposed connection": add "a" after "is".
 * 19) Remove hyphen after "Ring"
 * 20) Can you combine some of the short sentences in the second paragraph of the Service section?
 * Thank you for taking the time to review the article. All has been improved as requested. Arsenikk (talk)  17:10, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Passing. Dough4872 (talk) 17:45, 18 May 2009 (UTC)