Talk:River terraces (tectonic–climatic interaction)

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Holy Crumb! This is an amazing start - it's basically something that would earn a lot of points as a draft! Plus that's a great original figure - I guess it could be improved but it's already fantastic, as long as you provide a good explanatory caption.

However, note that while this will help you write your research proposal, this is not your research proposal. You want to keep this simple and direct, with short paragraphs and accessible concepts. Remember it has to be accessible to the high-school reader. A lot of science wiki pages disregard this demand, but you should not.

=Peer Review Jacob Bourgeois= Wow, this is a great page! I think that it is well written, aside from a few grammatical errors, but I think that some of the wording and sentence structure may be at a higher than high school level.

Terraces as indicators of tectonic-climatic interactions.
Delete the first "produce" from the first sentence. You may want to add a link to the word "incision" or explain it in a sentence because i do not believe most high schoolers are familiar with it. All in all a very well written paragraph! You may want to add links to a few words, and/or explain some of them in the paragraph, and/or "dumb down" some of the material. (I know the last one sounds terrible, but I remember when I was in high school, and a lot of the words used would have been "over my head" because I had simply not been exposed to them or the concepts around them.

Rate of Incision and Age of Terrace Formation
The reference for the first sentence is missing. (I don't think it's a big deal, I'm sure you're in the process of changing it) When listing all the ways to date I would use a colon after writing a complete sentence about the information being listed. Again, some of the wording used is a bit over the head of the tipical high-schooler. I might revise some of the terms used or further explain them in the paragraph. Other than those few things, I think the paragraph is well written!

Time of incision versus time of aggradation
This paragraph is well written, but again the wording may be a little over the top for high-schoolers. I like your drawing! It is well done and shows that you put forth a lot of effort!

Terraces as a result of climate change
Great section! I would change the flow of information about each of the rivers. Possibly a bulleted list, or decrease the amount of information for each.

Terraces as a result of tectonic change
I think this is good section. Again, wording with respect to a high-schooler, but other than that great!

Terraces as as a result of climate and tectonic change
Looks great! I like the listing in this section!

Scale of Observation
Looks great again!

Dustin's Review

 * overall this is a really good page and your figure looks awesome.


 * remove produce from the sentence "Long-lived river (fluvial) systems produce can produce successions of terrace surfaces over the course of their lifetime" — Preceding unsigned comment added by DBoyd13 (talk • contribs) 16:47, 22 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Many of your statements need to have references


 * You can link an internal wiki page for δ18O.


 * Try to simplify what you are saying so that anyone can understand it. For example not everyone will know what "glacial eustasy" is but they should be able to understand a global change in sea level due to the melting of glaciers. — Preceding unsigned comment added by DBoyd13 (talk • contribs) 17:01, 22 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I was not sure why this was on the page???

'''a)Normal fluvial systems where climatic forcing creates terracing


 * i)Rio Grande River [4]


 * (2)The long-lived river that flows through the Rio Grande rift valley allows study into how the river flowed through the valley for the last several million years


 * (a) ~5 Ma to Present


 * (i)Phase from 5 Ma to 800 Ka, was tectonically driven


 * 1. Where, in the semi-arid enivroment, was the aggradational phase
 * 2. High sediment supply and lower discharge


 * (ii) Most recent phase, from 800 ka – Present, is climactically driven


 * 1. This is the incisional phase


 * a. High sediment supply and high discharge
 * b. Regional occurrence of a 800 Ka terrace was noted. (dated the calcareous paleosol layer, or calcisol, at the top, and magnetostratigraphy. Correlated to isotopic and paleomagnetic records
 * c. Matched with Milankovitch cycle and changes in eccentricity


 * ii) Maas River in Belgium and France [5]


 * (1) 21 paired and unpaired terraces


 * (a) Represent Milankovitch-scale fluctuations


 * (i) Response of river during wet glacial and dry interglacial


 * 1. Wet drives sediment acculmulation and terrace surface development
 * 2. Dry drives sediment erosion and incision of terrace

''' — Preceding unsigned comment added by DBoyd13 (talk • contribs) 17:05, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

Jacob's Review
Main points:

Title too long/unsearchable. I had this problem with mine. Terraces and Climate? Climate-controlled terraces?

Simple succinct summary paragraph (abstract).

In all the Wikipedia pages I looked at, citations go after the punctuation. I wondered about this too and had to fix them.

“Data” is plural: Use “Data are”/”these data”

Some grammatical errors. Commas aren’t needed in some instances.

Through the article:

Tectonic uplift wiki short cut is broken.

Final sentence in lead-in paragraph should be a new paragraph or the topic sentence somewhere else.

“(Geomorphology book)” in text instead of citation.

Need same variable between equation and explanation of variables. Either 1 or i, not both.

I don’t get how the oxygen isotope fits in with sed flux. Maybe introduce it later?

Milankovitch wiki link incomplete

The writing style of your outline of fluvial systems as a result of climate jumps between telegraphic and another writing style. Makes it hard to follow. Pick one and the outline is good.

First sentence about marine terraces needs reworking.

Final sentence has extra words and commas.

I don’t think we should use elipses in articles.

Oliver's comments
The page seems, for the most part, bullet proof. The figures are excellent and you seem to be very knowledgeable about the topic. However, the organization could be a little better. I notice that some sections were just separated due to bold, print. Just start a new section and the page would be easier to navigate through. The reference section would also need to have its own section in the table of contents and not be located under the topic itself. I also enjoyed how the paper had a lot of links to other wiki pages because, i hate to say it, this reading level seems to be higher than a basic high school reading level. Overall, great job. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Onavo1 (talk • contribs) 19:43, 11 November 2012 (UTC)

The Scale of Observation subheading seems out of place. It is an important concept that needs to be covered earlier on in the article. — Precedingunsigned comment added by Jgross2atLSU (talk • contribs) 18:12, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

Eric
Really nice page. It looks intimidating at first because of the title but it's pretty easy to follow. I like all of your figures. I don't even know which one you made. Maybe if you could explain what "aggradation" means in the first part of your page, that might help as some people might not know. I also really like how you linked a lot of words to other pages and provided examples of real terraces that are studied for tectonic and climactic interactions. Ericorphys73 (talk) 05:46, 14 November 2012 (UTC)Eric

Zach's Comments
This is a very good page. Under Age of terraces, should there be a comma after magnetostratigraphy? I believe the page is pretty close to the high school level and the figures you have are easy to read and understand. The title might be a little hard to search for. You could make several sections instead of them being 1.1 etc. in the table of contents. The references should be their own section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zkelly1 (talk • contribs) 00:54, 15 November 2012 (UTC)

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