Talk:Riverside Park (Manhattan)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:00, 9 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments That's all I have here, on hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 07:57, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Riverside Park has many..." needs a period.
 * I'm not familiar with "land condemnation", I Googled it and Eminent domain seemed like a reasonable link for it?
 * The area seems to be only mentioned once, unreferenced in the infobox (and to three d.p for acres, yet whole hectares...)
 * And it was the wrong area to boot. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "191 acres (0.77 km2) " I would use hectares here instead of km2.
 * "By the 1850s, the city was" reiterate NYC.
 * "was slow to come" just slow, or slower?
 * It was "slower" to come. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "the Hudson River.[4][5][6][8]" four cites really needed for this one claim?
 * "Circa 1890" not the greatest descriptive caption I've ever seen...
 * "in 1880[16][21] and instantly" awkward ref placement, and I imagine "quickly" is more accurate than "instantly".
 * "starting with " redundant.
 * "though the monuments did fit in with the park aesthetic" according to whom?
 * "Trains travel through..." needs a period.
 * "was $11 million" non-breaking space between 11 and million, and consider inflation.
 * "would disband in" just "disbanded in" would be fine.
 * "the park[104] and" awkward, move to end of sentence.
 * " a couple hundred " not encyclopedic in tone. Do you mean "approximately 200"?
 * ✅ Added a more exact number. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "area co-ops " I assume you mean co-operatives?
 * "new Riverside Park South, s" why italics?
 * " new bike path" cycle path.
 * Actually, in the US they are generally called bike or bicycle paths. So I went with the latter. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "started in August 2016.[125] " still ongoing?
 * Yes, the first phase opened in 2019. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "A bike bypass " cycle.
 * See above.
 * "of the bike bypass " no need to repeat.
 * 72nd and 125th Street are overlinked.
 * As is Riverbank State Park.
 * "The uppermost register, " no need to repeat register here.
 * Hudson River Park and Battery Park and Fort Washington Park are all overlinked.
 * all.
 * Is it "Fireman's Memorial" or Fireman's Memorial?
 * Check other monument names, for whether they should be in italics.
 * ✅ Italicized appropriately, but most of these are not italicized, for some reason. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Age." [156] " remove space before ref.
 * Grant's Tomb, Ulysses S. Grant and National Park Service are overlinked.
 * "andmark[162] and a national" awkward.
 * "Soldiers' and Sailors' Monument" and "NYC Parks" are overlinked.
 * NYC Parks is overlinked three further times before the end of the article.
 * I hope I got all the overlinks. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * cafe or café?
 * Cafe. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "110th-111th" etc, en-dashes.
 * Basketball, tennis and volleyball overlinked. Questionable if they need to be linked at all really.
 * Soccer is also overlinked.
 * both.
 * "dozens of fun events for all " not an advert.
 * "Red-tailed hawk in Riverside Park" might be nice to mention this in the prose, and link the species.
 * NYC subway overlinked.
 * "Giuliani, a wild turkey resident in the park" why is this see also and not mentioned in the article at all?
 * ✅ to the article. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Spaced hyphens in the ref titles should be en-dashes.
 * A.L., E.P. - I think most recent advice is to space these A. L. and E. P.
 * Expanded the author names. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Soldiers' and Sailors' Monument" and "NYC Parks" are overlinked.
 * NYC Parks is overlinked three further times before the end of the article.
 * I hope I got all the overlinks. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * cafe or café?
 * Cafe. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "110th-111th" etc, en-dashes.
 * Basketball, tennis and volleyball overlinked. Questionable if they need to be linked at all really.
 * Soccer is also overlinked.
 * both.
 * "dozens of fun events for all " not an advert.
 * "Red-tailed hawk in Riverside Park" might be nice to mention this in the prose, and link the species.
 * NYC subway overlinked.
 * "Giuliani, a wild turkey resident in the park" why is this see also and not mentioned in the article at all?
 * ✅ to the article. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Spaced hyphens in the ref titles should be en-dashes.
 * A.L., E.P. - I think most recent advice is to space these A. L. and E. P.
 * Expanded the author names. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Giuliani, a wild turkey resident in the park" why is this see also and not mentioned in the article at all?
 * ✅ to the article. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Spaced hyphens in the ref titles should be en-dashes.
 * A.L., E.P. - I think most recent advice is to space these A. L. and E. P.
 * Expanded the author names. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Expanded the author names. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , thanks for the review. I have addressed some of the preceding points and will shortly address the rest. epicgenius (talk) 19:46, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I think I have tackled all of these now. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Marvellous, good work, promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:38, 11 April 2020 (UTC)