Talk:Roads to Vegas/GA1

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.''

Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:51, 13 September 2013 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Prose and clarity issues pointed out below
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * File:Road to Vegas promo.jpg fails WP:NFCC and should be removed.
 * Yeah. I didn't upload that, and Jclemens has already tagged it for removal.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:47, 13 September 2013 (UTC)
 * I think you meant User:J Milburn, rather than me. Jclemens (talk) 17:02, 14 September 2013 (UTC)
 * I was tired. Sorry J Milburn!  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 17:22, 14 September 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Plot
 * I don't suppose Dion's show, Celine, is mentioned by name in the episode?
 * No, it isn't.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Plot
 * I don't suppose Dion's show, Celine, is mentioned by name in the episode?
 * No, it isn't.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)
 * No, it isn't.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "Stewie decides to use the new teleportation device" - makes it sound as though Brian didn't use it. If not, why is he duplicated?
 * Done.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)


 * What does "Checking in a casino" mean?
 * I fixed this - the casino's part of the hotel.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "their luck makes itself present immediately with Brian hitting a big jackpot" - how about 'Brian wins a large jackpot'
 * Fixed.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "First pair" and "second pair" and "lucky pair" and "unlucky pair" are confusing. I'm not sure which is which, and which travelled by teleportation and which by air.
 * Alright, I've cleaned it up. Let me know if you have any issues with the way it's currently worded.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

"Directed by Greg Colton, the episode is Colton's fourth Road to... episode to direct..." - choppy. How about 'The episode was directed by Greg Colton, who had previously directed "Road to Germany", "Road to the Multiverse" and "Road to the North Pole".'?
 * Production and development
 * I used a slight variation of your sentence, to show that the episode were still "Road to" episodes.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "The episode was revealed as the finale of the series' eleventh season with the premiere of "No Country Club for Old Men"." - I read the sources as saying this episode was the penultimate one, and "No Country Club for Old Men" was the finale, but they were aired one after the other.
 * Done. I didn't change Callaghan's quote, though.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

I am placing the review on hold until these points are addressed. Adabow (talk) 22:25, 13 September 2013 (UTC)
 * I fixed them to the best of my abilities. Let me know what you think.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Much better. I wonder if you could mention somewhere that this episode and "No Country Club for Old Men" were aired back-to-back and together made the season "double episode" finale. Adabow (talk) 23:40, 13 September 2013 (UTC)
 * I've added it into the lead and the production and development section. I think that's what you wanted.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 23:47, 13 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Excellent. Passing now. Well done! Adabow (talk) 00:01, 14 September 2013 (UTC)