Talk:Robb Butler/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:51, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

Going to review this piece of work. MWright96 (talk) 20:51, 20 November 2017 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "He earned All-State honors in football his senior year in 1998." - make a slight adjustment to the text in bold so it reads as in football for his senior year in 1998 ✅
 * Wikilink passes and yards to Glossary of American football for non-experts of the sport. ✅

Early years

 * Pittsburgh, Pennslyvania is a redirect link ✅
 * Omit PNC Bank as the sponsor of the Big 33 Classic game as it is irrelevant ✅
 * "He garnered first team All-Pittsburgh City League" - gained ✅
 * Explain what a reception, touchdown and interception is meant in football terms by adding a wikilink to each of the three words ✅
 * "He accumulated six interceptions his junior year and six interceptions his senior season as well." - during his junior year & in his senior season ✅
 * "Robb visited Pittsburgh," - please use Butler ✅

College career

 * You've already wikilinked the Pittsurgh Panthers and Letterman (sports) in the previous section and you don't need another here ✅
 * "his sophomore year in 2000" - a slight rewording to during his sophomore year in 2000 will help ✅
 * Wikilink pass breakups to Pass deflects ✅
 * Do the same with forced fumble which must be linked to Fumble ✅
 * earning First Team Division I-AA All-American honors." - should be changed to earning him First Team Division I-AA All-American honors. ✅
 * Strong safety is a redirect link to Safety (Gridiron and American football) ✅

Professional career

 * Spell out the NFL in its full name and put the acronyms in parentheses like you have done in th lead. ✅
 * "He was released by the Chargers on September 5 and signed to the team's practice squad on September 6, 2004" -He was released by the Chargrs on September 5 and signed to the team's practice squad the following day. ✅
 * Added a link to kickoffs ✅
 * "signed by the Brigade on March 18 and placed on recallable waivers on March 27." - this piece of text would be better of being written as signed by the Brigade on March 18 and placed on recallable waivers nine days later. ✅
 * The Erie RiverRats and the American Indoor Football Association are redirect links ✅

Personal life

 * I will permit you to either write out MBA or wikilink the term. ✅