Talk:Robby Fabbri/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 17:44, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  17:44, 1 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Summarizing four years with the Blues into two sentences in the lead might not be sufficient. ✅
 * His mother's name is mentioned in ref 6, maybe add it on to the sentence about his heritage?
 * Found his dad's name too. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:03, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I know it's split between sections, but having two sentences beginning with "Growing up" doesn't sound that good. ✅
 * "and played with the year above his with" Who's "his" in this case? ✅
 * "150lbs" convert needed for this and 160lbs.✅
 * Done HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:03, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
 * "replace centre Tanner Richard on the team's" Might bet better to say the Rebels' first line for clarity.✅
 * "the Windsor Spitfires where he recorded one assist" Comma after Spitfires.✅
 * This is a better source for ref 17. ✅
 * "of the Game 1" Remove the "the" or go with "of the first game". ✅
 * "resulting in a 10 game suspension" That's not Fabbri getting suspended, right?
 * Right, it was the guy who hit him. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 15:19, 8 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "However" x 3 WP:EDITORIAL.✅
 * Make sure you link the penalties and use the correct link for the coronavirus. ✅
 * Ref 67 got deleted, you will want to find a new source.✅
 * Deleted ref and removed name

That should be it. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  06:45, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
 * , done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 15:19, 8 July 2020 (UTC)