Talk:Robert Harrill/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: ExcellentWheatFarmer (talk · contribs) 22:42, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

I'll be taking this one! Comments soon. ExcellentWheatFarmer (talk) 22:42, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

General Comments

 * Earwig caught a possible violation, but that was mainly the long quote in the Attraction subsection. As such, I'd recommend cutting the quote down and integrating it into the prose.
 * If it's ok, I'd rather keep it like that, added a full stop Mujinga (talk) 14:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Article and its corresponding talk page seem stable.
 * MoS seems fine.
 * Article does not seem to include any original research, and the sources are all verifiable.
 * In terms of images, they are all relevant and are appropriately tagged.
 * Article maintains a a neutral POV on the topic.

Lede

 * "His life has been commemorated in book, film and theatre." -> "His life has been commemorated through books, films, and a theatrical production."
 * rephrased
 * Are there any other major details of Harrill's legacy that could be added to the final paragraph? Ie, whether his "School of Common Sense" had any impact anywhere.
 * The Hermit Society sees an impact, others not so much. So no major impact is missing. I'll add a bit more though Mujinga (talk) 14:11, 10 January 2022 (UTC)

Early life

 * "He was educated at Boiling Springs High School and then Gardner-Webb Jr. College." -> "He was educated at Boiling Springs High School, later known as Gardner-Webb Jr. College."
 * source says "He attended Boiling Springs High School and later returned to the school, when it became Gardner-Webb Jr. College, to study ministry" Mujinga (talk) 14:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Gardner-Webb University
 * added, good spot! Mujinga (talk) 14:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "His parents were abusive and he spent a lot of his time in the local woods." -> "His parents were abusive, which lead to him spending a lot of his time in the local woods."
 * rephrased Mujinga (talk) 14:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * What year did the eldest son commit suicide?
 * all the sources kind of repeat the same story so the suicide is mentioned but not the timing Mujinga (talk) 14:17, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Is there any detail about what happened to Harrill in between the 30s and 50s? The article jumps straight from his family falling apart to him settling in Morgantan.
 * as above all the sources seem to skate over that part of his life Mujinga (talk) 14:17, 10 January 2022 (UTC)

Hermit

 * "He collected driftwood to furnish his humble house" Remove humble.
 * done Mujinga (talk) 14:16, 10 January 2022 (UTC)

Memorial and legacy

 * "Fred Pickler knew Harrill and with Anne Russell co-authored the book Life and Times of the Fort Fisher Hermit, Through the Lens of Fred Pickler." How did Pickler know Harrill?
 * source just says they were friends Mujinga (talk) 14:07, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * This source says "Fred Pickler took a lot of pictures [of The Fort Fisher Hermit] since he was a kid." Mujinga (talk) 14:29, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "Michael Edwards is president of the Hermit Society and wrote The Battle for Independence: The Story of the Fort Fisher Hermit." -> "President of the Hermit Society Michael Edwards wrote a book about Harrill, titled The Battle for Independence: The Story of the Fort Fisher Hermit.
 * rephrased Mujinga (talk) 14:07, 10 January 2022 (UTC)

@ That should be everything. Make these changes and I'll be happy to pass!
 * thanks for the careful review. in checking for more infos, I didn't find much but I did find out there was a second autopsy in 1984, which might explain why the body was moved to a different cemetery, i did wonder why that happened Mujinga (talk) 14:44, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Alright, that should be it! Congrats on the GA!