Talk:Robert Mallard/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TompaDompa (talk · contribs) 00:59, 19 June 2023 (UTC)

This is a WP:QUICKFAIL. Some of the issues I noted: I'll add some maintenance tags to the article. TompaDompa (talk) 00:59, 19 June 2023 (UTC)
 * In general, the article needs thorough copyediting for grammar, capitalization, and so on.
 * Amy’s family went to Baltimore – this is the first time Amy is mentioned at all, which means the reader does not have the necessary context here.
 * Mallard Amy were driving home – I'm guessing this is meant to say "[Robert] Mallard and Amy were driving home". This is one of many examples where copyediting is needed.
 * The article says that Mallard was born in 1918 and died in 1948. The sources say he was 37 when he died.
 * The article says that Clifton and Howell were acquitted. The sources say that Howell was acquitted and the charges against Clifton were dropped.
 * Herman Talmadge did not order an investigation by the Georgia Bureau of Investigation (GBI). After looking at the case, the agents went to Mallard's funeral [...] – this is rather a non sequitur. An investigation was not ordered, but the agents looked at the case anyway? Either something is wrong, or some clarifying information is missing.
 * Of the five men who surrendered – this is the first mention of anyone surrendering (apart from the same information appearing in the WP:LEAD). How did that come about?
 * While Howell's lawyer, Thomas Ross Sharpe, used the tactic of putting the jury under oath and making them stand before the judge. – grammar aside, according to the sources only two jurors were called to testify. The rather important detail that they were used as character witnesses for the defense is also omitted.
 * The article does not mention that the defense claimed that Amy Mallard was armed when her husband was killed.