Talk:Robert Mallard/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 21:36, 21 March 2024 (UTC)

Review

 * I will review this article. I may need to do some editing for expediency if you will allow it. Bruxton (talk) 21:36, 21 March 2024 (UTC)


 * My opinion is that this article is a long way from meeting our Good article criteria for a GA.


 * 1) The prose needs to be developed
 * 2) The page numbers of every book need to be stated
 * 3) Many citations do not seem to support the information
 * 4) The article is not complete and does not follow an expected order.
 * 5) I do not think the article is B class but I see that you rated it as a c and then upgraded it yourself to a B
 * Please do not get discouraged. Continue to take the suggestions of reviewers and improve the article. I was going to give it a go, but we are too far from GAN ready. Bruxton (talk) 14:20, 22 March 2024 (UTC)

Lead

 * We should not have citations in the lead per wp:leadcite. The lead should be summary and the items in the lead should be in the body and cited there.

Sections

 * needs work. Standard practice would be to remove the biography heading and change prior life to early life
 * Sections should be chronological and we should develop them. Have we said all there is to say about his early life?
 * Can we add a personal life section to the bottom?

Grammar

 * "elementary school with John and two of Amy's cousin's:" consider "cousins"
 * "When sheriff R. E. Gray arrived to the scene," Consider capitalize Sheriff and arrived at. "When Sheriff R. E. Gray arrived at the scene,
 * "Angelina, and William fled for Savannah, Georgia" consider "fled to"
 * "After the surrenders," should just be "surrender"
 * "and the group shot the vehicle with pistols, which killed Mallard.[9][10] When sheriff R. E. Gray arrived to the scene, they searched Amy's pocketbook and the vehicle.[11][8]" In my opinion this is not enough information. please develop this. And perhaps let the reader know more about the shooting and why this last sentence is important.

Images

 * We can see if an image can be found, and it can be included here under Fair Use

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