Talk:Robert Roth (activist)

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Within the subheadings to this entry, might it be more consistent with the other subheadings used to say "Students for a Democratic Society" rather than "Turning Full Attention to Students for a Democratic Society"?--Historytrain (talk) 00:37, 14 November 2008 (UTC)

FYI: When one clicks on the entry-end category "American left wing terrorists", an individual Wikipedia user name appears as a member of that category. Is that intended?--Historytrain (talk) 00:42, 14 November 2008 (UTC)

The external links section would benefit from a bit more cleaning up. There are broken and duplicate links. All would be more useful if they appeared with labels rather than urls only.--Historytrain (talk) 03:30, 17 November 2008 (UTC)

Do you think in the first paragraph it needs to say "and an advocate of the use of violent force to overthrow the government of the United States?" I would believe that saying Weatherman Organization says it all.Elizabethgaye22 (talk) 23:33, 17 November 2008 (UTC)

your first paragraph
While the content of the first paragraph is good, you might want to work on the wording so as not to repeat "He was...." Ossu (talk) 17:57, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

More comments and changes
This seems to be a well-researched article. I did, however, make several small changes which I recorded so you could track them. The main issues in the article involve punctuation errors and tense disagreement. There were a couple of oddly placed quotes which I modified (see track changes). You should try to avoid using the passive voice so frequently and avoid unnecessary use of the word "that". Finally, avoid repeated use of "Roth" and (especially) "Robert Roth" throughout the article. His full name is really only necessary in the beginning of the article but throughout the body of the page, it becomes redundant and unnecessary.

In the third paragraph of the "Students For a democratic Society" subtitle you wrote, "They released control of two buildings." I am assuming you mean SDS but it would be better to specify since it's a new paragraph. I also added a small bit of content to the Columbia University protest of the gymnasium in Harlem. When I read it was "intended to be segregated" it confused me because I didn't know if the gym was to be officially segregated, which would have been against the law in 1968(?). I thought it would be beneficial to elaborate on the specifics of this aspect of the event.--Pearlscholar (talk) 07:10, 24 November 2008 (UTC)

You have a lot of what should be internal wikipedia links in Red. PLease revise those and correct them so they will be reflected in blue color not red. You biography has a lot of factual information that sheds a great sense researched purpose. Your draft overall seems very complete and it is highly noticed that your research on Robert Roth was quite extensive, to a fault. Good Job! Texanlonghorn (talk) 08:18, 24 November 2008 (UTC)Texanlonghorn

Wrong Robert Roth??
Someone is adding content to this page which appears to be intended for a different biography! This page was originally about Robert Roth the political activist, not Robert Roth the musician. Please re-direct new additions to this page to a new page for Robert Roth the musician!!--Pearlscholar (talk) 08:44, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

Robert Roth
As Pearlscholar proposes, two different Robert Roths are described here. New Robert Roth (musician) entry needed and relevant disambiguity updates required. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 82.69.32.201 (talk) 17:05, 2 January 2009 (UTC)