Talk:Robin Lehner/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 20:23, 20 May 2022 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the ✅ tag to state when something is addressed.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Lede

 * I think I've mentioned this a few times, but can we try to avoid two links next to each other - ice hockey goaltender.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:33, 20 May 2022 (UTC)
 * This is the first time I think this particular issue has come up; it's pretty standard for the WP to be phrased as "professional ice hockey [position with link]", not sure how to rephrase in a way that wouldn't be awkward. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * father, Henrik Lundqvist's personal coach - needs a reword. is Henrik his father, or is his personal coach the father?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:33, 20 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Changed to who personally coached Henrik Lundqvist. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * but opted - opting...  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:33, 20 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Changed to opting instead. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)

General

 * Considering the person is from Sweden, maybe use association football rather than "soccer".  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Changed. Article (from Canadian source) used "soccer" so I accidentally overlooked. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Only 19 years old at the time, Lehner became both the youngest goaltender in Senators history and the youngest Swedish goaltender to appear in an NHL game in his debut. - a bit surprised this isn't in the lede.. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Added to lede. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * taking the win - featuring in a win, prior wording suggests he won the match for the team.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Just like MLB pitchers, individual goaltenders are credited with wins and losses, so I can change this if desired, but the old wording is still accurate. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * helped carry - puff, avoid.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Rephrased sentence.
 * taking the loss - I'm sure these are American terms, but they can be rewritten to just state the team lost.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * See below. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * taking the loss in the 7–6 Western Conference victory.[33 - did they win or lose then?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Rephrased as goaltending for the Eastern Conference team in their 7–6 loss to the West.
 * Meanwhile, after his exit, minor-league goaltender Andrew Hammond was called up and proceeded to take the Senators on a winning streak to the 2015 Stanley Cup playoffs - this isn't really about this subject.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Removed. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * His luck did not continue - are we saying all his previous victories were lucky?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Changed to He was less effective. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * dominate - puff, avoid.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Changed to was adept in net. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Just a note - it is a "semi-final" internationally.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Changed in the international section but not in the main body, as the NHL uses "semifinal". —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Where are the statistics section sourced?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Added source. —  Ghost River  18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)

Review meta comments

 * I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)  Lee Vilenski  (talk • contribs) 20:23, 20 May 2022 (UTC)
 * I've addressed everything except where noted. Unfortunately, it may be a moment before I can review something of yours, as I am still recovering from my motorcycle crash and will be moving across town in a couple of weeks. —  Ghost River  18:53, 27 May 2022 (UTC)