Talk:Robin Raphel/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sasuke Sarutobi (talk · contribs) 23:53, 5 November 2014 (UTC)

Hello! I have accepted the review nomination for this article, and shall be delivering a summary shortly. — Sasuke Sarutobi (talk) 23:53, 5 November 2014 (UTC)

Review
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citations to reliable sources:
 * A range of reliable sources are cited, including the State Department, books, and major newspapers.
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * Her career between leaving Tunisia and retiring from the State Department doesn't appear to be addressed in the main prose, only the lede.
 * B. Focused:
 * Sections remain on topic at all times, providing background . §Engaging the Taliban feels a little long, but I feel that a few of the surrounding pieces of information simply need re-ordering to improve flow.
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Article addresses both accomplishments and criticisms in a fair and impartial manner, without biased wording. Since federal investigation details have become apparent, article has attracted a number of editors who have changed existing wording in POV ways.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * Article is stable, and editors have been co-operative in the utmost in the sole discussion necessary. Again, recent details on investigation have drawn a lot of edits to the page in a short space of time. This is likely to continue while further information comes to public knowledge.
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * Both images are tagged, either as public domain work in one case, and Creative Commons in the other.
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * Subject is identified with a photograph in the infobox, and further illustrated with an image appropriate to the section in which it features.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * Subject is identified with a photograph in the infobox, and further illustrated with an image appropriate to the section in which it features.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:

Recommendations

 * "... leading Raphel's critics to lay blame on her for coddling the Taliban..." (in §Engaging the Taliban) - I feel that there are better words than 'coddling'; it feels a little too informal and vague for my liking. Could this perhaps be clarified, or if 'coddled' is the word used by critics, quoted?
 * "Her positions raised equal measure of praise and scorn." (in §Engaging the Taliban) - could we have some further detail? Are there any particular quotes from any key figures that would help illustrate this?
 * "Raphel served her full term and left in late June 1997." (in §Ambassador to Tunisia) - this seems to relate to her tenure as Assistant Secretary of State for South and Central Asian Affairs. Judging from the infobox, I would take it that August 2000 is the correct date during which she finished her term, but could you confirm, amend, and cite as appropriate?
 * §Engaging the Taliban overall feels like it could flow better, probably just with a slight re-arrangement of the existing text.
 * §AfPak diplomacy has a couple of figures that are uncited, both of which I've tagged to highlight them.
 * As above, her career between leaving Tunisia and leaving the State Department could do with being addressed in the main prose, if only to clarify what positions she held.

Criteria 1a and 2c would need further work to confirm, but this is just a matter of course, and I expect that everything will be fine for those. In the meantime, I felt that the providing the rest of the review would allow you to address recommendations made above. If there is anything further you need, please let me know! — Sasuke Sarutobi (talk) 01:54, 6 November 2014 (UTC)

GA failed
Unfortunately, in light of the investigation that has come to light, and the attention that this has drawn to the article, I feel that I have to fail the GA nomination. Please do not be mistaken; this is not a criticism on the subject for being under investigation, but a simple result of the investigation generating attention to the article in a way that would prevent constructive assessment and work. Please feel free to renominate the article at a later date. If you have any further questions, please feel free to contact me. — Sasuke Sarutobi (talk) 17:35, 8 November 2014 (UTC)

GA re-opened, placed on hold
Discussion with another reviewer and the nominator has convinced me that I was a bit hasty in closing the review. I've re-opened it and placed it on hold for the above issues to be addressed. A couple of other things that have emerged in the last few days: I'll post a fresh review with further points later today. — Sasuke Sarutobi (talk) 09:34, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
 * 'Federal investigation' section needs to be moved above 'Personal life' section;
 * 'Personal life' section has had some detail removed, which needs to be restored;
 * 'Engaging and co-operating with the Taliban' needs to be changed back to 'Engaging with the Taliban';
 * 'Hostility towards India' needs to be changed, perhaps to something like 'Perception within India'.

Review subsequent to federal investigation amendments
Going back to my original comments prior to what was a little of a panicked reaction, my review would be as follows:

Further suggested amendments
I hope that this provides useful detail for you - I'll leave the article on hold for another seven days so that you have time to address the above. A lot of this may be reiterated, but again, I feel that a lot of my earlier comments still stand. I've built the table from scratch, so it'll wrap correctly once it has some more detail on your side. As always, please let me know if there's anything else that I can do to help. — Sasuke Sarutobi (talk) 20:26, 18 November 2014 (UTC)


 * Good morning from Europe. Apologies but I will need a bit more time due to my travel schedule to finish this up. I will start work sometime tomorrow but will need a few days to really manage the various issues properly for your further review. Many thanks, --Mansoor Ijaz (talk) 09:17, 24 November 2014 (UTC)


 * That's fine, thank you for letting me know. The week-long period is essentially just so that drive-by nominators do not clog the system with articles that just stay on hold for extended periods, but as you have been addressing several articles within a tight schedule, the duration is not an issue. I'm starting on a copyedit of the article now, so I will work on completing the remaining review tasks ahead of your edits. Again, please let me know if there is anything that I can do to help. — Sasuke Sarutobi (talk) 13:19, 24 November 2014 (UTC)

Nomination abandoned?
I don't see a single edit to the article from nominator Mansoor Ijaz since this nomination was opened (indeed, none since last April!), and no edits to the article from reviewer Sasuke Sarutobi since the final edit to this nomination above. At this point, I would advise reinstating the nomination failure; it's been almost a month and a half since the nomination was reopened, and the lack of progress in that time is clear: even minor issues raised like "coddling" (a clear NPOV violation as stated) are still present. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:43, 21 December 2014 (UTC)


 * Sincere apologies, but my end of year business commitments simply did not permit the time necessary to return to this topic. I had planned on re-engaging during the break, which for me starts in two days. The amount of work involved in re-editing this article due to recent news as well as the matters raised by the reviewer require a block of thinking time that I just didn't have during the past six weeks. I will sit down and get to work on this during the latter half of the week after I have traveled. Sincerely, --Mansoor Ijaz (talk) 23:19, 21 December 2014 (UTC)


 * Mansoor Ijaz, I'm glad to read that you're intending to return to the article and address the issues. If there is no activity by the end of the year, of course, we'll have to revisit this. BlueMoonset (talk) 23:24, 21 December 2014 (UTC)

We're at over two months since the review opened without work done, and the writer himself noted it would be a good deal of work needed to make the above changes. Due to this I'm closing the review; it can always be renommed once Mansoor returns to actively editing. Wizardman 23:00, 10 January 2015 (UTC)


 * I was wondering how to re-open this GA nomination. asked me for assistance with this, and I addressed the concerns stated in the original review (or at least I think I did!). I know how to nominate an article but I'm not sure how a re-nomination (if it's called that) is performed. Do I simply re-subst the GAN template up top and remove the failed one? § FreeRangeFrog  croak 02:19, 12 February 2015 (UTC)