Talk:RoboCop/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 22:53, 5 February 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina wanna talk?

Infobox and lead

 * Normally there are references for the runtime, budget, and box office in the infobox.
 * Hi Dude, as long as the information is sourced in the article my Featured Article experience has been to not add citations to the infobox or lead. Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 10:06, 12 February 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for giving a reason! Guess you're right as it's already sourced in prose. Well, thanks for the comment and don't forget to mark the following suggestions with ✅ and ❌ so I can see your progress. Some Dude From North Carolina wanna talk? 23:43, 12 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Could we credit Dan O'Herlihy as Daniel O'Herlihy throughout the article to be consistent with the billing block and the infobox?
 * "Kurtwood Smith, Miguel Ferrer, and Ronny Cox" "Ronny Cox, Kurtwood Smith, and Miguel Ferrer" per credits.
 * Should Detroit, Michigan, Dallas, and Texas be linked? Seems like a violation of WP:OVERLINK.
 * Could the sentence "the idea with Miner, who had similar ideas" be reworded? It sounds a bit repetitive.

Plot and cast

 * Remove the commas after "Emil to Metro West" and "RoboCop attempts to kill Boddicker".
 * Cast section looks good.

Conception and writing

 * Remove the . in between the second and third references after "in the first act".✅
 * "bursting in to" "bursting into"✅
 * I couldn't find the "office daydreams about a robot bursting in to a meeting and killing everyone" here.✅

Development

 * The phrase "but consistent is he looked at the first page" needs rewording.✅

Casting

 * This section looks good.

Filming

 * Any reason for including Wednesday in the first sentence?✅

Post production and music

 * Can the last 2 sentences in the second paragraph be combined?✅
 * This wasn't done. ✅
 * Oh, I thought you meant combine it with the paragraph above. Give me 2 secs. Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 23:28, 13 February 2021 (UTC)


 * This reference says the full runtime was 102 minutes with 38 seconds so change "102 minutes" to either "102 minutes with 38 seconds" or "103 minutes."✅

Special effects and design

 * Is there a reference for the claim in the first caption which reads "His death was the highest-rated scene by test audiences"?✅

Release

 * "release on Friday, July 17, 1987" "release on July 17, 1987"✅
 * "ahead of re-release" "ahead of a re-release"✅
 * Shouldn't the dash in between "($7.1 million)—both" be changed into a semicolon?✅
 * For Jaws: The Revenge, $7.15 million rounds up to $7.2 million.✅
 * Is the link to 1987 in film in "the year's fourteenth highest-grossing film" necessary?✅

Reception

 * This section looks good.

Post-release

 * A reference is needed for the claim that the "VHS was estimated to have earned $24 million in sales".✅ "I mixed up the Indiewire and Uproxxx references" Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 12:19, 15 February 2021 (UTC)

Thematic analysis

 * This section looks good.

Legacy

 * This section looks good.

Sequels and adaptations

 * This section looks good.

Comments

 * Done existing comments as of 12/02/21 @ 10:07 Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 10:07, 12 February 2021 (UTC)