Talk:Rocky Mount Instruments/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 22:56, 31 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 22:56, 31 March 2021 (UTC)

Basic stuff and comments

 * Infobox looks good.
 * I switched to, seems to work better. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  11:19, 1 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "manufacturerd" is a typo.
 * Fixed. As a suggestion, if you spot an obvious typo (this one caused by some last minute lead adjustments less than 24 hours ago), the best thing to do is just fix it directly. If I hadn't fixed it, I'm certain somebody else would have done not too long afterward. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  11:19, 1 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Add serial commas after "harpsichords" and Genesis' Tony Banks.
 * Are you sure that's grammatically correct? It's been a long time (well, several decades) since I was studying formal English at school, but my recollection was you never put a comma before the final "and" in a list. Can you cite something from the MOS? Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  11:19, 1 April 2021 (UTC)
 * It's a serial comma issue (WP:Oxford comma) which states phrases listing two or more things should have a comma before the "and". It's grammatically correct with American English, which should be used as this article discusses topics from the U.S.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 00:02, 2 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Oh right. Always get confused with non BrEng stuff. Anyway, all instances (think it's just the three mentioned here) done. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  12:00, 2 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Commas are still needed after "harpsichords", "the Lovin' Spoonful", and Stevie Wonder.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 12:30, 2 April 2021 (UTC)
 * *sigh* Done. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  12:33, 2 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Try expanding the lead, and mentioning when the corporation went defunct.
 * According to WP:LEADLENGTH, an article of this size (about 9,000 bytes of prose) should have about two paragraphs, so I think the lead is about right. I've expanded it a little, though


 * "less voices" "fewer voices"
 * D'oh, fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:19, 1 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove the comma after "sixty-eight keys".
 * Done, also changed "sixty-eight" to 68 to be consistent with other key descriptions in the article.


 * Add a serial comma after "phaser".
 * Also add serial commas after "the Lovin' Spoonful", Stevie Wonder, and Mike Pinder.
 * See above. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:19, 1 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove the comma after "Hammond organ".
 * Done <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:19, 1 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Archive sources (either manually or with this tool).
 * If it's okay with you, can we wait for the usual bot to do this? It seems to do the job well, probably better than I would manually. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:19, 1 April 2021 (UTC)