Talk:Roger Federer/To-do


 * ToC is long with 42 lines. i would suggest combining sections 7 to 10 into one section
 * Lead sections talks of only records. I think that is unfair to the player. Non-tennis info on Roger should also make it there
 * I think the personal section can be bifurcated into 2 sections - one dealing with personal information and another dealing with social commitments
 * the following sentence is a misfit in the personal section: "Federer has won singles tournaments in 16 different countries:..." Moved to 2007 section (not by me). -- tennis man  23:14, 20 June 2007 (UTC)
 * General comment: The paras are too stubby. I usually use a yardstick of no less than 4 sentences for a para.
 * The following sentences needs references:
 * He also practiced football (soccer) until he decided to focus on tennis at age 13.
 * At 14, he became the national champion for all groups in Switzerland and was chosen to train at the Swiss National Tennis Center at Ecublens.
 * In July 1998, Federer joined the ATP tour at Gstaad
 * Professional career does not have references. I think you need to add ref to all victories at a min. In fact, i shall add a fact tag wherever i think there needs to be a reference.
 * what is "AMS final"? Is it the tournament name? My apologies. missed it in the prev sentence. --Kalyan 09:25, 19 June 2007 (UTC)
 * "In 2004, Federer had one of the most dominating and successful years in the open era of modern men's tennis." - POV statement unless backed by fact
 * "His forehand grip is somewhere between a modern eastern and mild semi-western." - as a non-tennis tech geek, i have no idea what the statement means. can you please add details
 * Records section: Need atleast a para in here rather than just point to a different article

Please leave a note on my talk page once you address these comments. --Kalyan 09:21, 19 June 2007 (UTC)