Talk:Ron Terpening

Persondata
The parameter I added is about Persondata, which is metadata that makes many things easier to automatically process for Wikipedia, please check out the link. It's not strictly necessary, but a good addition. The article has good content, but for a better rating the lead should properly summarize the article, please see Lead section - it is the first thing that readers see and needs to be a good summary of the article. I also think the individual paragraphs are too short and can be made into larger ones (not too much text, but five or six sentences is often used as an informal guideline for length of paragraphs). Regards Hekerui (talk) 14:48, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

Lead
An expanded, summarizing lead has been added to this entry. Newtonsand (talk) 19:09, 28 July 2009 (UTC)