Talk:Ronald Smelser/GA1

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 18:52, 23 July 2018 (UTC)


 * It is possible that I have the wrong end of the stick, but the details I can find on Folly's 2010 article in History are slightly different from those you give.
 * You're probably right; I'm seeing "volume 95, issue 320" here:, so I changed it. --K.e.coffman (talk) 01:02, 26 July 2018 (UTC)


 * A minor point, "the Reichswehr/Wehrmacht": the MoS suggests avoiding slashes. Would it be possible to reword to avoid this?
 * Fixed. K.e.coffman (talk) 01:02, 26 July 2018 (UTC)


 * "contains biographical sketches of the thirty leading members of the SS". Did you mean to include "the", or would the phrase be more accurate without it?
 * Fixed. K.e.coffman (talk) 01:02, 26 July 2018 (UTC)


 * "Smelser established the annual Holocaust "Days of Remembrance" programming at the University of Utah". 'Programme'?
 * Fixed. K.e.coffman (talk) 01:02, 26 July 2018 (UTC)


 * Optional point. "high school aged children". I consider myself an educated person but I honestly don't know what age range this is. (And I used to work in education.) I realise that Smelser was probably aiming at an American audience, but it may be useful to rephrase, or bracket an explanation, to make the meaning more accessible.
 * ''Changed to "teenagers" for clarity. K.e.coffman (talk) 01:02, 26 July 2018 (UTC)


 * Minor point. "explaining their impact on the popular culture." Is "the" necessary?
 * Fixed. K.e.coffman (talk) 01:02, 26 July 2018 (UTC)


 * Minor point. "The Foreign Affairs magazine called the book" Again I don't think that a definite article is necessary.(The one introducing the sentence.)
 * Fixed. K.e.coffman (talk) 01:02, 26 July 2018 (UTC)


 * Minor point. "from the popular history writers and the World War II enthusiasts." Again, IMO, the article would be the better for losing the two definite articles.
 * Fixed. K.e.coffman (talk) 01:02, 26 July 2018 (UTC)

A fine article. Really good work. Nice to see these sort of "back room workers" getting the credit they deserve. (Especially stalwarts like Smelser; but that's POV.) Gog the Mild (talk) 19:02, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for your edits. A fine article there. Good to see. Gog the Mild (talk) 09:11, 26 July 2018 (UTC)