Talk:Ronnie Henry/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:37, 10 January 2020 (UTC)

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 20:37, 10 January 2020 (UTC)
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 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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Lead

 * It would help to clarify the fact that Henry is a professional association football player, particulary to help seeking clarification to what type it is
 * ✅ SBFCEdit (talk) 22:53, 14 July 2021 (UTC)


 * "for National League South club Billericay Town." - for the
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 * "Henry was part of the Stevenage side that won the FA Trophy in the first ever competitive final at Wembley Stadium in May 2007; becoming the first ever player" - try to avoid using the same wording of "first ever" twice in the same sentence
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 * "although was appointed as an academy coach at the club two months later." - although is considered editoralising per MOS:EDITORIAL
 * ✅ SBFCEdit (talk) 22:53, 14 July 2021 (UTC)

Early career

 * "and started two more matches during the loan spell." - not stated by the BBC Sport attached to it. The Soccerbase 2002/2003 source does though so that will have to be replaced accordingly.
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 * "He played twelve matches during his time there," - not confirmed by the FAI source; use another source in the article to verify this information
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 * "although was released by manager Roddy Collins due to financial problems at the club." - also the same citation does not mention Collins released him due to financial trouble; another source is required to verify this
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Stevenage

 * "Henry had started the campaign in an unfamiliar central midfield role, but reverted to full-back " - better and more neutral reverting to the role of a
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 * "However, in January of the same season," - better and more neutral In January of that season,
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 * "At the end of the season, Henry signed a new two-year contract with the Hertfordshire club." - unverified, requires a reliable source to cite it
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 * " At the Football Conference's Annual Presentation Dinner, he was named in the Conference Premier Team of the Year, alongside fellow Stevenage defenders Scott Laird and Mark Roberts." - The Non-League Paper source does not mention this information but the "Ronnie 469: A history of our record breaking captain" from Stevenage F.C. Does. I suggest citation bundling.
 * ✅ SBFCEdit (talk) 22:53, 14 July 2021 (UTC)


 * "Henry made his 250th appearance in all competitions for Stevenage during the club's 0–0 draw at home to Torquay United," - the BBC Sport citation does not mention it was Henry's 250th match for Stevenage. However, the "Henry has been a marvellous servant to Boro – Westley" from The Comet does. I suggest citation bundling
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 * "He went on to make 40 appearances during the campaign," - the Soccerbase 2011/2012 reference should be used to verify this information in the prose
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Luton Town

 * "He played in 43 games during the 2012–13 campaign," - use the generalised Soccerway source in the article to verify it in the prose
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 * "Henry captained Luton to the Conference Premier title," - Henry is not mentioned by name by Luton on Sunday. Another source is needed
 * ✅ SBFCEdit (talk) 22:53, 14 July 2021 (UTC)

Return to Stevenage

 * "his appearance in the club's 1–1 away draw with Morecambe" - there is no mention of the 1-1 away draw with Morecambe; another citation is required
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 * There is a similar issue about their game against Swindon Town being played at Broadhall Way
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 * "Henry was appointed Youth Development Phase Coach in Stevenage's academy " - of
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 * "at Stevenage spanning nearly 15 years." - lasting almost 15 years.
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International career

 * There is no mention in the BBC Sport source that the England C vs Finland C match took place in Helsinki
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Style of play

 * "where he has been used for the majority of his career.[15][14][10]" - all references should be in numerical order
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 * "Towards the end of his second spell at Stevenage, as well as upon signing for Billericay Town," - more concise and at Billericay Town,
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 * "as well as during his time at Luton and Billericay.[76][14]" - same issue as above
 * ✅ SBFCEdit (talk) 22:53, 14 July 2021 (UTC)

Personal life

 * "He is the grandson of former Tottenham Hotspur defender Ron Henry,[13][10][80]" - same problem as mentioned in the previous two points
 * ✅ and moved 'Personal life' section to 'Early life' per MOS. SBFCEdit (talk) 22:53, 14 July 2021 (UTC)


 * The same sentence should end with a full stop and not a comma
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 * " and says that his grandfather has been a "huge inspiration" to him throughout his career." - better . Henry has said his grandather was greatly infulential to him throughout his career.
 * ✅ SBFCEdit (talk) 22:53, 14 July 2021 (UTC)

Career statistics

 * The notes located at the bottom of the table require a reference as seen in mulitple GA articles.
 * ✅ These are located in the references in the 'season' section of the career statistics table. SBFCEdit (talk) 22:53, 14 July 2021 (UTC)