Talk:Ross Island Penal Colony/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 18:38, 20 August 2015 (UTC)

Hi. I'm Calvin999 and I am reviewing this nomination. — Calvin999 18:38, 20 August 2015 (UTC)


 * imprison a large number of prisoner → Slightly repetitious to say imprison... prisoner, and perhaps slightly obvious? Imprisoning prisoners?
 * Changed to “jail” if you like it otherwise can change it to whatever you suggest


 * Is there any particular reason why citations are in the lead? This is supposed to be a summary of the rest of the article.
 * Removed all the references and fixed wherever relevant in other sections.


 * Island, the British administration made the island → Same as the first. You actually use islands three times in this sentence.
 * Changed to “it” in between


 * In later years the colony also experimented for a short time with civilizing the indigenous people of Andamans. The penal colony was also used → Repetition of 'also'
 * Removed word “also”


 * not only by the Japanese → Why?
 * Sentence made more clear.


 * The first batch → Refrain from using 'batch'
 * Changed to “group”


 * However, Ross Island was comparatively a better place as Colonel RC Tytler and his wife Harriet had improved the facilities for the community. → Better than when?
 * Context provided


 * In the 1870s, according to reports, → According to reports in the 1870s,
 * Done


 * The political prisoners → Why do you use political throughout when referring to prisoners?
 * Removed repetitions


 * of World War I, in 1914, → Remove comma after I
 * Done


 * therefore their release in one stage, following capture of the island by a German ship by bombardment, was risky. He therefore suggested → Therefore... therefore
 * Deleted “therefore”


 * When, out of the 288 inmates, 81 tried → When 81 out of the 288 inmates tried (You add many clauses in some sentences)
 * Done


 * censured → What do you mean by this?
 * Now changed to “reprimanded”


 * He got absorbed → He was absorbed
 * Done


 * Another political prisoner who suffered the longest period of 47 years of incarceration at the colony was Musai Singh who was released for good behavior in July 1907 on the occasion of the 50th anniversary of India's First War of Independence in 1857.[1] → Just tack this on the end of the previous paragraph, a one line paragraph looks odd.
 * Done


 * efforts to get his father's release → efforts to have his father released
 * Done

On hold for 7 days. — Calvin999 20:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Outcome


 * . Thank you very much for the review. I have addresses all issues in the article. My replies above refer. I hope compliance is done properly.-- Nvvchar . 10:43, 21 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Great, passing. — Calvin999  10:54, 21 August 2015 (UTC)