Talk:Roxette/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aircorn (talk · contribs) 13:35, 2 March 2012 (UTC)

Will review this over the weekend

Comments
I have read through the article and made some changes as I went. You might want to check that I haven't introduced any inaccuracies. Have left some comments below. Feel free to question any of them. AIR corn (talk) 09:15, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Formed in 1986, the duo became an international act from the late 1980s, when they released their breakthrough album Look Sharp! while their third album Joyride became just as successful. This needs some work. It seems to saying that Joyride was successful in them becoming a worldwide act. Some re-wording could tidy it up.
 * ✅ Is that better? Mattg82 (talk) 20:56, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 * According to Gessle, the group's first English-language release was in response to interest expressed by EMI's American label Capitol Records, in an attempt to reach into the lucrative American market Which was it? the expressed interest or a the lucrative market. If both it needs to be re-written slightly.
 * ✅ Mattg82 (talk) 20:56, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 * The story was covered by radio, newspapers and TV in the US and in Sweden, with Gessle recently telling this as the story which highlighted the beginning of their international success Overcite. Can you chose one or two reliable ones that support the sentence/
 * The cites support the whole paragraph, I placed them at the end to actually avoid overciting. Mattg82 (talk) 19:31, 8 March 2012 (UTC)
 * A note could be used, but this is not a biggy. AIR corn (talk) 09:55, 12 April 2012 (UTC)


 * "Dressed for Success", featuring Fredriksson on lead with Gessle singing short parts for accentuating, was the second international single.Is for accentuating correct? Fredriksson on lead what? Vocals?
 * ✅ Mattg82 (talk) 20:01, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 * The single also topped the charts in more than 20 other countries (including Australia[28]) around the world Why single out Australia?
 * "The single also the UK and achieved success ..." grammar.
 * ✅ Mattg82 (talk) 19:31, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 * The resulting merger saw many personnel changes that resulted in a downturn in the publicity for Roxette. I think this is trying to say that the merger meant there was less publicity available for Roxette, but I am not sure. Might need some re-wording
 * Yes that is right, the quotes by Gessle explain the situation. Mattg82 (talk) 19:31, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 * However, the song was moved to the soundtrack to the film based on the Nintendo video game Super Mario Bros This doesn't make sense. Should "to the film" be "of the film"?
 * ✅ Mattg82 (talk) 19:50, 22 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Roxette took a turn with the 1994 release of Crash! Boom! Bang!. Took a turn at what?
 * ✅ Mattg82 (talk) 20:01, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 * The band did re-write some of their lyrics but used the original lyrics after all during the concert. This has a citation needed tag that needs addressing.
 * ✅ Removed Mattg82 (talk) 19:50, 22 March 2012 (UTC)


 * The "Don't Bore Us - Get to the Chorus!" album was published in a special edition entitled: "Don't Bore Us - Get To The Chorus! [Roxette's European Promo Tour]", this album doesn't contain track-list of original edition, but appear only 4 audio tracks that correspond to Abbey Road versions, that are just acoustic versions recorded in live at Abbey Road Studios on November 15th, 1995, songs in this álbum are: 1. "The Look", 2. "Listen To Your Heart", 3. "You Don't Understand Me" and, "Help!" (The Beatles), this article is considered a rarity in the Roxette discography This needs some work
 * ✅ Removed again. The same editor keeps inserting the same info which is about an unofficial bootleg. Mattg82 (talk) 19:31, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Gessle reunited with Gyllene Tider in 1996 for what turned out to be a successful reunion, before Roxette took instrumental masters of many of its ballads and recorded translated Spanish lyrics over them. What does this mean. The reunion was successful until Roxette got involved?
 * ✅ Is that better? Mattg82 (talk) 19:50, 22 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Johan Lindqvist from Göteborgs-Posten was more positive, scoring their Munich concert four stars. Out of how many?
 * ✅ Mattg82 (talk) 20:01, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Some of the references don't link to the correct page (i.e. ) also there must be a better ref than this for the Rockbjorns.
 * The Rockbjorn ref is best that is available. Aftonbladet founded and own the awards. There doesn't seem to be a separate awards website. Mattg82 (talk) 20:01, 8 March 2012 (UTC)


 *  It was his first Swedish-language solo album in 18 years and became very successful in his home country. This appears to be WP:Synth. Would be better to attribute or rationalise (i.e. reached number 1).
 * ✅ Mattg82 (talk) 19:50, 22 March 2012 (UTC)


 * It is expected to comprise up to 130 concerts[104] and run until October 2012,[102] with the band performing to over 800,000 people in the 79 concerts held in 2011 alone Needs updating
 * ✅ Mattg82 (talk) 19:50, 22 March 2012 (UTC)


 * They will undertake a full UK tour in 2012, with dates confirmed in Glasgow, Manchester and Birmingham. On January 13, 2012, it was announced that two further concerts were planned for China, after the Chinese Ministry of Culture gave them permission to play More updating needed
 * ✅ Mattg82 (talk) 19:50, 22 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Titles expected to be featured on Travelling include, "Me & You & Terry & Julie", "Lover, Lover, Lover", "Excuse Me, Sir, Do You Want Me To Check On Your Wife?", "Angel Passing", "Touched By The Hand Of God", "Turn Of The Tide", a track originally written and recorded during the Have A Nice Day sessions in 1998, a live performance of "Stars" recorded during a soundcheck in Dubai, a new version of "Perfect Excuse" from Gessle's 2008 solo album Party Crasher featuring Marie on vocals and two versions of a song titled "It's Possible", one being an electronic version, similar in style to "She's Got Nothing On (But the Radio)", while Gessle referred to the other as a 'summer style' version, similar in arrangement to the Gyllene Tider track "Hjärta utan hem", stating it has 'more like a sixties feel to it. We couldn't decide which version we prefer, so we actually took both. This sentence is a bit too long.
 * ✅ Removed Mattg82 (talk) 19:50, 22 March 2012 (UTC)


 * I haven't forgotten about this, I will try and fix the remaining comments this week. Mattg82 (talk) 14:37, 19 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Ok I think I have fixed most of your points now. I just need to update the chart refs so they point to directly to Roxette's chart entries rather than a search page. Mattg82 (talk) 19:50, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
 * Changes look good. Will finish this over Easter. AIR corn (talk) 13:28, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

I am going to take a break for a while s will close this as a pass. The only concern unaddressed was that many of the chart links lead to a search engine instead of the actual page. While not ideal t is still not a major problem, and considering the rest of the article it still merits a pass. 23:10, 14 April 2012 (UTC)