Talk:Roy Lester/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Brad78 (talk) 22:05, 6 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * Seems a bit light. On reading through the article, I'd mention something more about his time at Maryland; perhaps the turnover of coaches before he took over, his previous applications or the reasons for his sacking. Or perhaps all three.
 * Expanded. Let me know if that is satisfactory.


 * Early life
 * "Lester was named to the West Virginia 1940–1949 All-Time Team." Is this right? 1940–1949 and All-Time Team seemed to be a bit contradictory.
 * Fixed.


 * High school coach
 * "He then moved on to Allegany High School in Cumberland, Maryland." Rather than use "then" it would be better to say which year.
 * I used "following year" to make it less redundant with repeated numerical years.
 * I agree about the overuse of years and dates. Nice change. Brad78 (talk) 18:32, 10 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Maryland
 * "In the season's second-to-last game," Would penultimate game not be better?
 * Changed.


 * "Lester attributed Maryland's football woes to the turnover at head coach and lack of depth due to recruiting shortcomings." recruiting shortcomings doesn't quite sound right. How about recruitment shortcomings?
 * Changed.


 * Return to high school coaching
 * "His combined high school coaching record was 260–72–3." Do you have a source for this?
 * Removed it, because I can't find a source. It looks like he won 260 games at Montgomery County schools alone though, which wouldn't include Walton or Allegany.


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * On the whole, a good read and well written. Just those points above need addressing.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * Just needs a reference for the record, as above
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Brad78 (talk) 22:19, 6 September 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Brad78 (talk) 22:19, 6 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Brad78 (talk) 22:19, 6 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the review. I made some changes to address your comments. Please let me know how that looks, and if you have any other concerns. Strikehold (talk) 23:41, 9 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Everything's great now. Nice expansion on the lead. Now passes the GA criteria. Brad78 (talk) 18:34, 10 September 2010 (UTC)