Talk:Roy McGrath/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mokadoshi (talk · contribs) 05:16, 16 March 2024 (UTC)

Lead

 * According to MOS:FIRSTBIO, the first sentence of a biographical article should list noteworthy positions and what they are best known for. Currently, your first sentence is Roy C. McGrath was an American political operative and fugitive...etc.... This definitely satisfies what he's best known for, but I think you should begin the first sentence by introducing him as either the former chief of staff to Hogan, or as "a former Maryland public official" or something similar. Definitely don't want to overload the first sentence, so I'll leave it to you. I might suggest looking at other articles from List of American federal politicians convicted of crimes, like perhaps Duncan D. Hunter. Mokadoshi (talk) 23:26, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
 * ✅ Lead looks good now, thanks. Mokadoshi (talk) 00:59, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

Layout

 * Optional: It is not required, but biographies typically begin with an "Early life and education" section followed by a "Career" section. Mokadoshi (talk) 23:26, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Coverage

 * McGrath resigned in August 2020, and he was not to appear in court until March 2023. Other than the testimonies that he provided in December 2020, is it known what else he did between those dates, other than the testimonies he gave that are already discussed in the article? Mokadoshi (talk) 23:26, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
 * @Mokadoshi I've just made a change that should fix the issues with the lead and "probably misled" citation. I'm working on the other issues now. As for what McGrath did between August 2020 and March 2023, all that's been publicly reported about what McGrath did during this timespan is that he moved from Maryland to Florida, claimed Hogan approved of his severance package, and testified to the Joint Committee on Fair Practices and State Personnel Oversight about his tenure at the MES. Y2hyaXM (talk) 00:19, 24 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Yep, that's what I thought. I'll mark "broad coverage" as complete then. Mokadoshi (talk) 00:29, 24 March 2024 (UTC)
 * @Mokadoshi I've made further adjustments that should fix the other issues you've added. Please let me know if you have any other recommendations, especially regarding the Steve Thompson article. Thanks for reviewing! Y2hyaXM (talk) 00:45, 24 March 2024 (UTC)