Talk:Royal Space Force: The Wings of Honnêamise/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Morgan695 (talk · contribs) 15:27, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I will be reviewing this. Full comments to follow, but my immediate reaction is that structuring the article as 14 master sections, many of which are very large, makes the article very unnavigable. I would recommend before I review, that you structure the article to resemble something resembling the list below. Morgan695 (talk) 15:27, 23 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Plot
 * Cast
 * Production
 * Development
 * Writing
 * Pilot film
 * Design
 * Screenplay
 * Animation
 * Music
 * Release
 * Marketing
 * Japanese release
 * English-language release
 * Reception
 * Japanese critical response
 * English-language critical response
 * Sequel
 * See also, notes, etc

Hi I talked the nominator into nominating this for GAN and told him I would help out so I will also take part with working on concerns. GamerPro64 17:11, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Sure, that's fine. I think it makes the most sense to implement the article re-organization I recommended above before I start my review. It shouldn't be just difficult, just adding subheaders and moving text around. Morgan695 (talk) 17:25, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Note that you don't have to follow the exact format I suggested above; if it makes sense to merge/remove/add subsections, please do so. Morgan695 (talk) 18:34, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The headers been worked on. GamerPro64  19:39, 25 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead
 * "later to share the Academy Award for the soundtrack to The Last Emperor, served as music director" interesting trivia, but I'm not sure it belongs in the second sentence of the article.

Plot
 * The article in general suffers a bit from WP:OVERLINK. In the first paragraph of the plot alone, "middle-class", "spaceflight", "satellites", "preaching", "red-light district", "astronaut", and "orbit" should not be linked. I would recommend doing a proofread of the article to remove wikilinks from terms like these that are easily understood in context.

Voice cast
 * Both the Japanese and English casts need to be cited, ideally with a secondary source but if not, citing the work itself is adequate (see Adolescence_of_Utena)

Development
 * Again, check for overlinking
 * When using the term "OVA" for the first time here, spell out in full (i.e. "original video animation (OVA)") and then use the acronym for all subequent uses

Pilot Film
 * Uncap "Film" so header reads as "Pilot film"
 * Italicize Die Meistersinger von Nürnberg

English-language release
 * All images have proper rationales except File:HonneamiseHD.jpg here, which is currently licensed for use in a lead infobox. The image should be removed from the article, as it does not communicate information that File:Royal Space Force Poster.jpg doesn't already.

Further reading
 * These reviews should be integrated into "English-language critical response" or removed. None of them, with the possible exception of the DVD Talk review, feel substantial enough to stand on their own as Further reading; the Carl Gustav Horn link is also broken.

External links
 * What is the significance of the four unformatted Internet Archive links to the Gainax site?

Closing comments
 * This is a well-written article, and will happily pass it for GA once these changes are made. If you seek to take this article to FA, or even just develop it further, I would strongly recommend including a "Themes and analysis" section that sources scholarly articles on the film. There is a depth of material on this film in academic writing, paticularly the sexual assault scene, and the article feels somewhat incomplete without it. However, the article as currently constituted is more than adequate to meet GA standards, once these edits are made. Good work. Morgan695 (talk) 19:57, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Well done. This is a good article. Morgan695 (talk) 17:36, 26 October 2020 (UTC)