Talk:Rozen Maiden/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gabriel Yuji (talk · contribs) 03:47, 11 November 2013 (UTC)

The article is well-written and seems to be able to get GA status. I see no major problems. However, you must to do some corrections, and I will do some suggestions you can apply or not. These are:
 * what about to introduce Peach-Pit as group? ex: "Rozen Maiden is a manga series written and illustrated by the manga artist group Peach-Pit"
 * I will leave it to the linked article since there wasn't a need to refer to them as two separate people.


 * italics are missing in several words; e.g. tankōbon, Weekly Young Jump
 * Probably got them all.


 * Jun Sakurada withdraws from the society as an overall or from a specific society?
 * General society.


 * bisque doll must to be linked
 * Done.


 * what about to remove the streaked part "Rozen Maiden has spun off anthology manga and novel stories, art books, and four anime series ; the four anime series are titled Rozen Maiden, Rozen Maiden: Träumend, Rozen Maiden: Ouvertüre, and Rozen Maiden: Zurückspulen"? or instead of repeating "the four anime series" put "these being" on its place?
 * I prefer splitting it up to reduce run on. I believe it is better to have the previous sentence introduce the types of media and the second semi-connected sentence to expand on it.


 * the "Jp" notes must to be after the punctuation to maintain the standard of references; for example Saitou must to be on this way: Saitou, (斉藤) instead of this way: Saitou (斉藤),
 * Nihongo foot ties very strongly to the word than the sentence so it doesn't have to follow the common inline citation rules.


 * "eloping" in this case is the act of pratice the elopement?
 * Thanks, I didn't realize how precise the sentence structure was.


 * Everything is covered by sources; what happens with the last sentence of Souseiseki's description?
 * Sourced.


 * in "She often ends her sentences with na no", "na no" must to have quotation marks
 * Good point.


 * Zurückspulen must to be in italic in "Laplace's Demon"
 * Done.


 * the third picture wouldn't be better placed if it was in the right?
 * I kept it on the left in case the infobox pushes the picture in higher zooms. DragonZero  ( Talk  ·  Contribs ) 03:56, 12 November 2013 (UTC)


 * Shoujo no Tsukurikata (少女のつくり方) instead of lit. "How to Make a Girl" (少女のつくり方); it's aesthetically unsightly the "lit." in the middle of the sentence
 * Replaced with Nihongo 3


 * the same reason to change lit. "The Rozen Maiden That Should Not Have Existed" (まいてはいけないローゼンメイデン) for Maite wa Ikenai Rozen Maiden (まいてはいけないローゼンメイデン)
 * Replaced with Nihongo 3


 * "Pony Canyon released the series into six DVDs and a box set" rather than " ony Canyon released into series six DVDs and a box set."
 * Yes, I missed that mistake.

These are the issues I could find. Soon, I'll take a new look at the article, and I think I can pass it. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 03:47, 11 November 2013 (UTC)
 * I have addressed the points. DragonZero  ( Talk  ·  Contribs ) 02:54, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

The article is now ok to me. I think you did a great job, so I'm glad to pass it. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 04:26, 12 November 2013 (UTC)