Talk:Russ Winnie/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 14:50, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

I'll review this one tomorrow. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 14:50, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

Lead

 * Change Russell Griffith Winnie to Russell Griffith "Russ" Winnie
 * What is the reason for piping sports commentator to "sportscaster"? If anything, "sports commentator" probably has more mass appeal/understanding. I would also make this change in the infobox (linked there too)
 * I had been basing the style off of the one used on Vin Scully, but changed it per your suggestion. BeanieFan11 (talk) 16:04, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Recommend changing A pioneering sports announcer to A pioneer in his field to avoid repetition with the previous sentence.
 * Can you add his tenure for each team in the infobox?
 * I know the Packers tenure (1929-46), but am not completely sure about the others. We know the length of tenure for each team, but not the exact years, it seems. What would you suggest? BeanieFan11 (talk) 16:04, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The way you have it makes sense if the years aren't known. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 17:03, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Seeing as his wife is not notable, I would recommend removing her from the infobox.

Early life

 * When he was aged seven feels clunky. At the age of seven sounds a bit smoother.
 * and was declined -> but was declined (no comma)

Broadcasting career

 * He was their announcer as they won their first six championships in franchise history under coach Curly Lambeau, and Winnie became highly popular among fans, being known for his "dramatic style and extensive vocabulary." Recommend splitting into two sentences, adding a link and rewording a bit: He was their announcer as they won their first six NFL championships in franchise history, all under head coach Curly Lambeau. During his tenure with the team, Winnie became highly popular among fans, being known for his "dramatic style and extensive vocabulary."

Personal life and death

 * No need for the comma after wife

Images

 * Non free image used, seems appropriate considering the subject is dead