Talk:Russell family (Passions)/GA1

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:23, 2 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Thank you for picking this up for review. As you can probably tell, I have been working a lot on trying to update the pages related to this fictional family. I look forward to your comments! Aoba47 (talk) 04:47, 2 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Just a friendly reminder. :-) Aoba47 (talk) 00:35, 15 June 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * All good

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 * Insert a comma after "the married couple Eve Russell and T. C. Russell, and their children"
 * "As the series progressed, four more characters were added to the family: Eve's vengeful, adoptive sister Liz Sanbourne, Eve's child with Julian Crane, Vincent Clarkson, Whitney's husband and Liz's son, Chad Harris-Crane, and Eve's aunt Irma Johnson." --> "As the series progressed, four more characters were added to the family: Eve's vengeful, adoptive sister Liz Sanbourne; Eve's child with Julian Crane, Vincent Clarkson; Whitney's husband and Liz's son, Chad Harris-Crane; and Eve's aunt Irma Johnson."

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 * "African American" --> "African-American"
 * "Despite the criticism, the cast was frequently nominated for NAACP Image Awards. The cast was prominently featured in a series of public service announcement for Black History Month in 2003." --> "Despite the criticism, the cast was frequently nominated for NAACP Image Awards and prominently featured in a series of public service announcement for Black History Month in 2003."

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 * "soap opera since its start" --> "soap opera since its premiere"
 * Link "NBC" in its first mention in this section (minus the lead)

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 * Rest is great work! :)

Core family members

 * I know you currently have the family members listed alphabetically, but you should probably list them in order of importance; for example, I would list them as the following:
 * Eve Russell
 * T. C. Russell
 * Simone Russell
 * Whitney Russell
 * Vincent Clarkson


 * What do you think of that example?
 * I agree with this idea. I also applied this to the "Extended family" section and placed Liz (who was a regular for around five years as opposed to Irma who was only on for a couple months). Aoba47 (talk) 01:47, 18 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Carbrera (talk) 02:12, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Eve Russell

 * Add "actresses" before "Amanda Maiden and Kimberly Kevon Williams played Eve in flashbacks.[12]" please
 * Link "the Odd Couple" to the article for the original television series please, not the current 2015 series
 * The phrasing is referring to how the pairing of Julian and Eve was shocking and odd since they appeared to have absolutely nothing in common. I am pretty sure it is not a reference to a show. Aoba47 (talk) 01:47, 18 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Oh whooops. Lol. My bad! Carbrera (talk) 02:12, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Simone Russell

 * I don't think you have to include the exact dates for the different actresses, but if you find no problem with it you can keep it as well
 * I removed the dates from this section and the other section as well. Aoba47 (talk) 01:47, 18 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Carbrera (talk) 02:12, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

T. C. Russell

 * Italicize The Young and the Restless please

Vincent Clarkson

 * In the caption, please change "sexuality and gender identity and his incestuous and criminal storylines." --> "sexuality and gender identity with his incestuous and criminal storylines."

Whitney Russell

 * Nothing :)

Chad Harris-Crane

 * What about instead of "unnamed Harris-Crane", "an additional child"?
 * I agree. I only used "unnamed Harris-Crane" as it was something all of the other Passions pages used (I thought it was pretty odd myself).
 * Thanks. Carbrera (talk) 02:12, 18 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Again, I don't think you have to include the exact dates for the different actors, but if you find no problem with it you can keep it

Irma Johnson

 * Add "actress" before "Marla Gibbs" please

Liz Sanbourne

 * Add "actress" before "Amelia Marshall" please
 * I moved this section before Irma. I hope this is okay. Aoba47 (talk) 01:47, 18 June 2016 (UTC)
 * No it is, thanks! Carbrera (talk) 02:12, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

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 * Who initially gave the show "negative reviews for its lack of development and focus on the Russells in comparison to the other families"?
 * I included this as a topic sentence so that I could have some sort of organization to the section. I can remove this if you think it is unnecessary or inappropriate. Aoba47 (talk) 01:47, 18 June 2016 (UTC)
 * It looks good there. Carbrera (talk) 02:12, 18 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Link Entertainment Weekly here please

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 * Unlink Entertainment Weekly here please

End of GA Review:
Sorry for the delay in review, but this is a very good article that doesn't need a lot of help. ON HOLD for seven days to allow for changes. @PING me here with any questions, comments, or concerns. Thank you, Carbrera (talk) 20:58, 17 June 2016 (UTC).
 * Thank you for your review! Don't worry about the delay as I am just glad you grabbed this for a review in the first place. I have put a lot of work into this article so I appreciate your comments. I have addressed all of your comments. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Aoba47 (talk) 01:47, 18 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Will be passing now. Thank you! Carbrera (talk) 02:12, 18 June 2016 (UTC).
 * Thank you! :-) Aoba47 (talk) 02:20, 18 June 2016 (UTC)