Talk:Rwandan Revolution

Review

 * Canada Education Program/Courses/The World since 1789 (Stéphane-D. Perreault)/Articles

It was required that on November 15th we were to have posted our draft articles up to be peer reviewed. There is no recent editing on this article at all so doing the whole peer review thing is kind of difficult but here is what I came up with, I hope it helps and good luck!

The first thing I would like to note is that the article does not have anywhere near the word requirements, but once it is started on, that will obviously improve. I believe it is quality, not quantity. Don’t just go on about something irrelevant to the article to reach the word count, staying on topic is key at this point. It is not thorough enough to be a reliable source for any reader yet, but once again, that will be improved once there are changes made. For the amount of information in the article at this point in time, the amount of references is sufficient but as the article grows, more will need to be added along with the information. It would be a good idea to add in headings to organize the article a little more and to help the readers navigate to where they want to be. I would suggest playing around with the formulas on changing the font, making headings and adding links in your sandbox. I found it really helped me and after a short while I was capable of doing the formulas on my own without even looking at the former examples. Another thing I found very helpful was when I found something important like a name or a date, I made sure it was correct by looking at another source and comparing the two. It would be nice to see more information regarding who was involved, who was in charge, the exact location, more detail on the battle itself, the cause of the battle, the aftermath, and as much background information as you could possibly find. When you are putting in the information however, be careful that you do not plagiarize. Reference things and give credit to those who deserve it! Try not to be bias in the article, it will not look very good for you when people read it. Research is very important, the more information you can get to describe the topic, the better. You can never have too many facts. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Molenchuk (talk • contribs) 02:48, 20 November 2012 (UTC)

Removed edit
I've been working myself to develop the article, and I can see someone else also wrote a considerable amount. His edit was deleted however. I'm not sure what the grounds were for deletion. Im restoring the edits by merging the existing and current article. It was sourced, and it doesnt seem that the content is untrue. I hope someone else will read the article and comment on the updates. Ottawakismet (talk) 16:43, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
 * That edit was done by the sockpuppet of a banned user. It appears that account's edits were reverted per Deny recognition. Please vet the content before you add it in to ensure there is no misinformation or sneaky vandalism. —maclean (talk) 19:13, 5 January 2013 (UTC)

Work in progress
- thanks for coming by and putting the tags on the top of the article, and just to let you know that I am actively working on this page at the moment. So far I've focussed on some of the background and prelude to the revolution, which has led to the lopsided structure in which the related fluff occupies more space than any commentary on the revolution itself. I very much hope that I will be able to rectify this over time, hopefully in the next couple of months. Thanks! &mdash; Amakuru (talk) 22:50, 9 January 2014 (UTC)

Ruanda-Urundi
Before independence, to the best of my knowledge, the idea of Rwanda and Burundi did not exist - Ruanda and Urundi did! Would it not make sense to use terms which had contemporary meaning throughout the article? —Brigade Piron (talk) 08:35, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Hi, I think this is really just a question of spelling and orthography. The terms "Ruanda" and "Urundi" were coined by Germany (I think) when they colonised, but were based on the precolonial names for the Kingdom of Rwanda and Kingdom of Burundi. The two words here are taken from the local languages. I doin't know how the colonies and their predecessors were known in English sources at the time (I haven't had access to many of those), but a majority of modern English sources do use "Rwanda" and "Burundi" when referring to the precolonial kingdoms. For example: . I think a bit more explanation in the text might be in order though, I've noticed the term "Ruanda-Urundi" only appears as a main topic, not in the prose, that's something I'll look into clarifying. &mdash; Amakuru (talk) 10:18, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks ! Fantastic work on the article. —Brigade Piron (talk) 10:21, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Incidentally, I've made some cosmetic changes to the prose and added a picture. I hope you don't object! —Brigade Piron (talk) 10:21, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * No, that's fine, thanks for assisting! I'm not quite sure about the RPF / FPR thing though... the books I have on the subject all call it "Rwandan Patriotic Front" (or "Rwandese Patriotic Front" in the case of the Gerard Prunier book), with the initials "RPF". This is consistent with it being founded in an English speaking country, although confusingly the flag does spell it "FPR", perhaps as a means of appealing more to the French speaking population in Rwanda at the time of the civil war. Anyway, more generally, I'm hoping to have a run at WP:GA with this shortly, and maybe then onto WP:FA. Do you think it's ready for that yet? Are there any sections that need expanding or changing, in your view? Thanks again! &mdash; Amakuru (talk) 10:32, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes, I don't think there should be any problem getting the article to GA without content change. I worry that it might be a bit cursory for FA though. Good luck! —Brigade Piron (talk) 11:41, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * yes, I see what you mean, looking at it now. I guess each of the subsections in the Revolution section could be expanded by a couple of paragraphs for completeness. Thakns &mdash; Amakuru (talk) 15:41, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

1958 attempt to marginalise Rudahigwa
Anyone able to confirm this?

In 1958 the Belgian colonial ministry tried to strip Rudahigwa of his power, reducing him to a figurehead, but his popularity with the regional chiefs and the Tutsi (who feared the growing Hutu movement) sparked a series of strikes and protests.

Unfortunately, p.257 is missing from the preview, but although p.258 mentions a strike, and a protest, it doesn't sound like they were because Tutsi chiefs were concerned about moves to marginalise Rudahigwa.

I've not seen mention elsewhere of the attempt to reduce the king to a figurehead in 1958. Bromley86 (talk) 23:27, 23 August 2016 (UTC)
 * unfortunately I don't have that book to hand - I originally sourced those passages from a copy at the British Library two years ago. If I get the chance soon, I@ll go back and try to verify what it says. Thanks &mdash; Amakuru (talk) 17:39, 5 September 2016 (UTC)
 * I've had a chance to look at the page in question now, and it is reproduced here: . The particular line in question says "Although the Belgians decided that Rudahigwa should 'reign and not rule', the decision was difficult to implement." This is cited to a G. Mosmans, who is also mentioned on the same page. Although the protests weren't directly about the attempt to sideline Rudahigwa, the Tutsi conservative movement apparently resulted from increasing hostility by the Belgian administration towards the king and the Tutsi court. If you think any of this is misrepresented in the article, pleae let me know. Thanks &mdash; Amakuru (talk) 10:39, 7 September 2016 (UTC)

To infobox or not to infobox
I'm commenting here to explain my reversion of your addition of the conflict infobox in more depth. To be frank, my familiarity with the Rwandan Revolution and related events is somewhat spotty, but I did write the articles on the Coup of Gitarama (which was arguably the climax of the revolution) and the later Bugesera invasion (a disastrous attempt to undo it). The use of the conflict infobox I think is too reductive and, deployed as it was, misleading on several key points. Firstly, by portraying this as a pseudo-military conflict (which the choice of infobox implies), it suggests that this resembled a war, which I think is too simplistic. Secondly, you categorized the country of Belgium and Colonel Guy Logiest as a "belligerents" alongside Kigeli and Logiest. A reading of the article, or even the third paragraph of the lede, would demonstrate that this is simply incorrect. The Belgians suppressed both movements and their violent actions early on but, by the end, the colonial authorities and Logiest were acting in ways which strongly favored the Hutu revolutionaries and deprecated the royalists (and they conceded as much). The opinion of the Belgian government is Brussels at this time is a little more unclear. I don't know why you chose to restore this blatantly wrong information when you reverted my removal. Furthermore, your citations for the "casualties" are imprecise, making it difficult to understand the figures you're including and how relevant they are to certain timeframes (e.g. much violence against Tutsis and political opponents occurred "after" the revolution, so do these refugee and death figures include those during 1959-1961 or also thereafter?). And with regards to timeframes, you listed exact dates, including 25 September 1961, which is mentioned nowhere else in the article. In conclusion, revolutions can get complicated, and this infobox does not do anything to help in those regards. -Indy beetle (talk) 06:51, 25 April 2024 (UTC)