Talk:Ryan Boyle/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 03:27, 26 October 2010 (UTC)

Overall this article is pretty good. Here are the issues I found:
 * "As a sophomore option offense quarterback, he totaled 812 yards rushing, five touchdowns and 465 passing yards, including four touchdowns." can be reworded to '812 yards and five touchdowns rushing and...passing.'
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:35, 26 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Write out what USILA is on one of the early mentions of it.
 * Put a link in the WP:LEAD.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:41, 26 October 2010 (UTC)
 * "as part of t 14-point 3-game" of a
 * Good eye.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:42, 26 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Any playoff info for the 2003 championship? 2002 and 2004 are noted so thought I'd ask.
 * Actually, he is not mentioned in any NYT or Baltimore Sun articles, so for the purpose of WP, he did nothing notable in either of the 2003 games.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:54, 26 October 2010 (UTC)
 * "Boyle scored 2 goals and had 3 assists in the Philadelphia Barrage 16–15 overtime loss" two/three
 * Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:55, 26 October 2010 (UTC)
 * "Boyle's father, Darby, played attack for West Point in the late 1960s and his older brother Michael played for Georgetown." I presume both played lacrosse? Make that clearer.
 * Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:57, 26 October 2010 (UTC)

Not too much to fix. I'll put it on hold and pass when it's done. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:27, 26 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks good, GA now passes. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 04:05, 26 October 2010 (UTC)