Talk:Ryan Crowther/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk · contribs) 09:36, 23 December 2011 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: none found

Linkrot: one found and tagged. Jezhotwells (talk) 09:56, 23 December 2011 (UTC)

Checking against GA criteria

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * On 18 November 2011, he left Hyde in order to join Fleetwood Town on a free transfer.[18][19] He played a total of 17 games scoring nine goals in his short spell with Hyde.[20] He made his Fleetwood Town debut a day later as a second-half substitute as his side beat Stockport County 2–1. I think this needs reconfigruing as as it stands we jump back and forward between hyde and Fleetwood.
 * After just one more appearance, as a substitute, in a 1–0 defeat to Harrogate Town,[10] he left the club to be sentenced in prison for four months. I know this is explained further down, but I think you need to explain the offence here. Also the phrase to be sentenced in prison for four months. is wrong.  "sentenced to prison" is correct.
 * He was tried for racially aggravated assault occasioning actual bodily harm but a jury acquitted him of that charge, but found him guilty of an alternative charge of assaulting the taxi driver. is very badly written.
 * The lead shouldn't have a stray sentence at the start.
 * I think drop the personal life section and put the assault and sentence in the main bio.
 * I have made a number of copy-edits. Jezhotwells (talk) 11:56, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * ref #23 just redirects to the Club home page, I can't find anything at the Internet Archive, but should be easy to find something else.
 * ref #2 says: "He went on to make two senior appearances – including one as captain. Aged just 17, it made him the youngest skipper in Edgeley Park history. " This does not support the statement:  where aged just 17, he came on as a substitute and was made captain for the rest of the match,
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Crowther also said he liked the band Oasis. This is pure trivia and is irrelevant here. As I note earlier just drop the personal life section as there is little material for it.
 * There are inconsistencies between the number of appearances for clubs in the info-box and in the article text.
 * He scored his first goal for the club, in a Manchester Premier Cup game against Irlam Town, which Crowther's side won 7–0.[13] He played 25 games in the 2010–11 season in total, scoring four goals. is a very poor summary of his career at the club where he made the most appearances. Perhaps there really is not enough material here to satisfy criterion 3#a?
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * NPOV
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * There are a number of issues that need addressing, but my main concern is that there really is not enough here to satisfy criterion 3#a. It is possible that whilst the player is notable by the standards of WP:ATHLETE, there may not be enough material to satisfy the broadness of coverage.  Not every article has the poetntial to become GA and I think this may be just such a case. On Hold for seven days.  I would like to see rather more material about his career at Ashton and Hyde where he made the most appearances. Jezhotwells (talk) 10:52, 23 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Just one remaining issue. Jezhotwells (talk) 11:56, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * The last remaining issue has been fixed.  Liam Taylor  16:25, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * OK, happy to list. Jezhotwells (talk) 20:58, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Just one remaining issue. Jezhotwells (talk) 11:56, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * The last remaining issue has been fixed.  Liam Taylor  16:25, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * OK, happy to list. Jezhotwells (talk) 20:58, 27 December 2011 (UTC)