Talk:Séance Time/GA1

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Reviewer: Numerounovedant (talk · contribs) 11:26, 12 May 2016 (UTC)

I will get to this by Sunday. Numerounovedant  Talk  11:26, 12 May 2016 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "Hives (Shearsmith) sits her at a table" - Why is it relevant?
 * Seances typically take place at a table; the characters really over-egg it, as well ("Please be seated" and all that). Josh Milburn (talk) 11:15, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * wikilink "seance"
 * Now linked in the lead, production section and plot. Josh Milburn (talk) 11:15, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * " but they had not previously had an idea for an original approach" - it is too wordy IMO. How about simply - " but had not had an idea for an original approach"
 * I've rejigged; I specified "previously" because it seems like the way approached it here was original. Josh Milburn (talk) 11:15, 21 May 2016 (UTC)


 * Production
 * A sub-heading for "Development" in the beginning
 * I've gone for "Writing and filming" instead; how's that? Josh Milburn (talk) 11:15, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * The filming part could go after the second paragraph
 * Yes, good idea. I have rejigged those first two paragraphs a little. Josh Milburn (talk) 11:15, 21 May 2016 (UTC)


 * I apologize for the delay, but I'll go through the rest in a couple of days.  Numerounovedant   Talk  14:43, 16 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks- just noting that I have seen this; I'm just waiting on receiving the remainder of your comments before making changes. Josh Milburn (talk) 16:30, 20 May 2016 (UTC)


 * "the wetness of Terry's clothes" - Terry's wet clothes maybe?
 * No- the clothes were not added, it was only the wetness. I agree that it's not very prosaic, but it's a slightly odd idea I'm putting across. Josh Milburn (talk) 11:15, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * "it was instead shown at 10pm on Wednesday 29 April at 10pm in most of the UK, and at 11.20pm in Northern Ireland." - a little clumsy if the time is same for US and UK why mention separately?
 * There is no mention of the US? I'm not sure I understand what you mean. Josh Milburn (talk) 11:15, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * You mention 10pm twice, I presumed it might have aired separately (in the US), which is clearly not the case here. So, why mention 10pm twice? - "shown at 10pm on Wednesday 29 April at 10pm in most of the UK" Numerounovedant   Talk  14:44, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Quite right; I can't believe I missed that. I've made some fixes. Josh Milburn (talk) 16:09, 21 May 2016 (UTC)

Rest looks good. Great work! Numerounovedant  Talk  10:40, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much for taking the time to have a look through. Josh Milburn (talk) 11:15, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * I believe the production section might work better with "Writing and development" followed by "Casting and Characters" and lastly "Filming" (with the last paragraph from writing). But it's strictly a suggestion, it is perfectly good the way it is presently. As soon as these comments are addressed I'll be happy to give the verdict. Numerounovedant   Talk  14:44, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Yes, good idea. I have merged the "release" section in with filming to prevent it from being a very short section. I've also renamed "Horror and comedy" (which is a title I really disliked) to "Style". Josh Milburn (talk) 16:09, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Perfect. Another great article! Pass. Numerounovedant   Talk  16:51, 21 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much- I appreciate the review! Josh Milburn (talk) 17:39, 21 May 2016 (UTC)