Talk:SAS President Steyn/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 01:23, 20 November 2016 (UTC)

Well constructed, will come back shortly. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 01:23, 20 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section 1; para 1; Consistency error between prose and infobox.
 * {| class="wikitable"

! Parameter !! Prose !! Infobox
 * length || 370 feet (112.8 m)|| 370 ft 0 in (112.78 m)
 * beam|| 41 feet (12.5 m)|| 41 ft 0 in (12.5 m)
 * Draught|| 17 feet 6 inches (5.3 m)|| 17 ft 6 in (5.33 m)
 * }
 * Fixed
 * Draught|| 17 feet 6 inches (5.3 m)|| 17 ft 6 in (5.33 m)
 * }
 * Fixed


 * Consider the adding the "power" parameter to the infobox.
 * Already there, see installed power.
 * Section 2; para 1; President Steyn was the middle ship of the three sister ships; the sentence is a bit awkward. Consider rewording it as "President Steyn was the second of the three sister ships" or "President Steyn was the second ship of the class".
 * Section 2; para 1; A comma after "8 April 1963"
 * Section 2; para 1; with Captain John Fairbairn was in command; I think just "with Captain John Fairbairn in command" is enough.
 * Indeed.
 * Section 2; para 1; It is mentioned that she was completed on 8 April 1963, but when was the ship commissioned, it is never mentioned.
 * Good catch
 * Section 2; para 2; Please mention what is "Capex 63". An exercise?
 * Moved up from Capex 64
 * Section 2; para 2; I suggest a non-breakable space between "Capex" "64" in "Capex 64", for me, on my screen, Capex and 64 appear on two different lines which is a bit awkward.
 * OK
 * Section 2; para 2; A comma after "In 1965".
 * No, it's not really a prefatory clause.


 * Section 2; para 2; The abbreviations RN and SAN are never defined previously.
 * Good catch.
 * Section 2; para 3; made another voyage to Toulon the following year; Did both President Steyn and Emily Hobhouse go, or just Steyn, mention clearly.
 * Good idea.


 * Section 2; para 3; Better to mention Johanna van der Merwe's place of build. I mean French-built, Spanish-built etc.
 * Clarified a little more indirectly.
 * Section 2; para 3; A comma after "In 1973".
 * Section 2; para 4; link "Operation Savannah"
 * Oops.
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 10:59, 27 November 2016 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 12:08, 28 November 2016 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 12:08, 28 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 12:08, 28 November 2016 (UTC)